we toast and drank
the wine of our happiness
it filled our hearts with
marital bliss
until one day you
no longer felt the same
leaving me holding
a flaming rose
a dieing heart
mine....
Author notes
under construction....
In a list
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Sad love sometimes fades like the rose. Especially when exposed to cold.Strong relating of emotions.
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This was such a beautiful write. Heartfelt and tangible. This was so wonderfully penned.
simply beautiful.
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Wow
Oh my this was so powerful. And the ending. Whew!
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I don't know if by your Author's Notes this is a poem you're still working with, Brenda, but my only advice is not to re-work and rewrite the simplicity you've drawn so far. It's a scene and metaphor of love as it passes away, and works well to my reading.
It's a touching poem to which so many can relate...
Jo
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