If I had been a part of you
somewhere, deep inside
I do not know what parts of me
you chose to keep or toss aside.
Assuming you had not resisted,
allowed a part of me to stay,
what kind of evidence would I see,
would still be lingering today?
I suppose I am a chest of tools
that you may try in varied tasks,
keeping this, discarding that
as you test their usefulness…
On the surface, we’re day and night
and on the surface I did not dwell;
the part of me you may have kept
is somewhere deeper than your shell…
Perhaps you do not know I’m there,
those tiny little wiggly me's;
and then again, perhaps they’re gone,
evaporating in the heat…
The only way for me to touch
the you I see before me here
is to leave such bits behind
that will pass the tests of time
somewhere deep beside your heart
in a locket on a chain
or on the edges of your mind
in happy echoes of refrain…
I’m sorry if they did not seem
like things of substance, held and seen,
they’re more like…
I suppose I should refill the hollow emptiness I left…
In a list
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are 'tiny little wiggly mes' sperm? ew.
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lol just saw this... hmmm... I believe that was what I was trying to avoid...!
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Suspect! Intriguing. OK, alright, I see what you're thinking, so I will explain it, for I am not a shallow butt-sniffing dipweed like another adult we both knew here, and who may be your sole frame of reference, and I want you to see the difference- this is a piece designed to get the subject to see beyond her shallow shell, for any relationship or personality based on that will crumble in the slightest breeze. The piece about the mirror is of a similar theme. The last part pertains to my not being as social as I once was, and I never explained why (because I don't know why) which left people confused, empty and hurt, this subject included.
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Yeah, but its kind of, like, a romance, isn't it? Because the person "seeing behind her shallow shell" is you, written from your point of view. Right?
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Good question on romance- maybe Platonic, maybe supportive, maybe teacher/student, for think: where would this romance lead in the real world- I certainly can't catch her, she runs the mile 5x faster... nor would my family approve, and I've been married 21 years now... would she be attracted to me physically? Hahaha... sorry, maybe if I was the only man left in the world, but not with more suitable competition available... for perspective note that I did say that I may hit on her mother if I attended her wedding... then there's my son, I could hook her up with him, he's a few years older than her, but girls are still a decade or two away for him... and my daughter is a year younger, and she is more than enough teenage trouble for me in real life... so romance, I would have to confess yes, in a way, but it will (and should) forever remain in the realm of fantasy and support. Is there 'love', you might ask... yes, on my end, but I loved her spirit first... and consider, I love my daughter, doesn't mean I want to marry her! (she's too argumentative anyway, got that from her mother...) So, I hope this gives you a bit more perspective on all of this... now the 'shallow shell' is very important here- I don't want her getting caught up in her looks at the expense of everything else, especially her heart...
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She doesn't get caught up in her looks, really, good to know you don't either.
Did you know I'm her boyfriend?
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oohhhh.... Dad!
that is one cool poem!! I sure enjoyed readin' it
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well Jonathan sums it up..lol..I can vison some parts,tools the right size for the chest..well start from the head down..lol nice post here, SH
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you’ve chose to keep or toss aside.
perhaps
you’d choose/you'd have chosen to keep or toss aside.
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in worthy echoes of refrain. ...
how can one refrain from refains where earthy echoes are worth ?
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for :
I suppose I should refill the hollow emptiness I left…
perhaps
Should I fill the emptiness I left…
or
Should I fill the hollow I left…
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One supposes that the answer 'lies' in the form of the relationship ... symbiotic or parasite ... on par a sight ? -
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thanks, I see you're a tinkerer, too... (and mine often need a bit of chiseling right out of the box...) now to look at it after I've rested my late-night eyes...
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