Looking out over the plain
Feeling the suffering around her
The innocents that have been lost
The pain in those that she loves hearts
Tears in her eyes that she angrily blinks back
Not letting the sorrow consume her heart
She has a better way
The razor blade in her pocket
The cuts on her wrist
Once a sweet angel
alas has fallen into darkness
As she feels the blood flow out
Feeling lost and confused
She’s sick of it all
of all the names she is called
Just because she’s different
Is that really so bad?
They call her fat...
But she’s not overweight
She’s just not like them
It makes her heart ache
Each scar on her
Tells a story
that no one wants to listen too
They call her stupid
Is she stupid for finding a way to cope?
She’s sorry she’s like this
But don’t you see
It’s not her fault
And that’s what this
Cutting angel
Needs to believe
Its not her fault
Author notes
#10: Choose 10 of these words
Suffering
Innocents
Pain
Sorrow
Tears
Blood
Razor blade
Darkness
Angel
Scars
Cuts
Fat
Stupid
Sorry
Lost
Confused
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A contest entry
- Depressing.... with options by Ntagatf.
500 points, ended September 19, 2007, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I can see why this won gold. The depth of emotion is so amazing. I can relate to feeling this way at one point myself. I never went as far as hurting myself but I know how the pain can get that bad. Great expression's of those emotions.
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thick dark story
sad but true that suffering can bring relief, what does not kill us does make us stronger.i had a problem with last line in the first paragraph.For me Pain in the hearts of those she loves sounds better. Not sure if it has the same meaning for you.
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Congratulations sweetheart
This was amazing write.Love You
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wow amazing, i love this its perfect great job!!! thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck, keep up the great work!
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god your amazing angel your writing just grabs me by the heart
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Woah sweety, that send shivers down my arms. i luffles you, though the only thing i could suggest is go through and make sure there are no mistakes, things that dont make sense and all that.
good luck in the contest darls.
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wow omg
this actually made me cry
but maybe that because my moods abit blah lol
a wonderful write though
very deep and heartfelt.
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This has bought tears to my eyes it is really sad but it is a really good write.Goodluck in the contest sweety.
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