Walls closing in on her
She’s alone
Watching the cut seeping blood
Smiling crooked at her bleeding
As the strange sensations rips at her soul
Honey could you hear her screams
Her heart calls in the night
Her soul crying out
As the night slips by
Look at her fake smile
Sitting on her lips
Watches the bimbo
That makes her life hell
What does it take to be a winner?
Too make others look at you without hate in their eyes
Just because you wear black lipstick
Just because you’re gothic
You’re the weirdo
Does that mean you don’t have feelings?
Walking down the halls
Hurting and abused
She can’t take this...
It will end
She lays used and bloody on the floor
Her Eyes can cry no more tears
Pulled the trigger
No one cares
Though they said they loved her
Inside she was dead
Like they made her
Author notes
Option #6: WORDBANK (use at least twenty words)
Weirdo
Walls
Halls
Calls
Bimbo
Winner
Lips
Smile
Strange
Crooked
Bleeding
Cut
Honey
Gothic
Black Lipstick
Trigger
Dead
Bloody
Used
Abused
good luck judeing brother
love ya
yea this sucks
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A contest entry
- Give Me Something Amazing by So Strange.
950 points, ended September 25, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow this hit me. a powerful piece.
great job on the usage of the words best of luck to you .
Tory -
so emotional angel id be a mess if i tried to write something like that lol..your a brilliant writer and an even more amazing person
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wow
I enjoyed this piece... alot of pain was shown.... I really do hate that people asume gothics are wierdos... which they are not... Like i mentioned ZI enjoy this piece
Good luck in the contest!!!
-UnheardPain -
wow
this was so sad
it sorta relatable which is bad
but this was amazing
if you dont win gold then the juidge is mad
i loved this
well done and best of luck
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Your Amazing this is brilliant write sweety it does not suprise me at all that you came up with this.Goodluck in the contest sweety.All my love
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I thought that this was very tragic and sad. I enjoyed this piece because there was so much emotion in it that I couldn't believe that someone could just come up with this so quickly. But then again, a lot of poets are so good that they don't need time to think through their poetry.
I also liked the flow and wording of this.
Good luck in the contest!
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