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Acceptance Dance

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She stands on river's brink to think
of future fair ahead,
holds hands with wonder's link to ink
all hope heart, silent, said.
She dreams beyond the veil this tale
to share where most, mundane,
can compromise, hope's gleam won't fail
to soothe away past pain.

She sways below the mountain high
to rhythms heart may start
to startle into starlit sky
from hibernation, chart
the way to interplay which may
anticipations meet,
where each day's reach may break away
from cares, and, sharing, greet
dreams blessed as fears fade, laid to rest,
metamorphosis wished -
renewed is zest, heart's treasure chest
unlocked, unblocked, relished.

She leans into the breeze and sees
fresh opportunities
where Love love frees to please, to tease,
to seize beyond the seas
Joy where she understands all lands
by rainbow bridge are spanned,
as mountain lies at peace with skies
where providence joins hands
with laughter, light, by day, by night,
by insight spurred to fly
on wings of white to true delight -
acceptance seeks no 'Why ?' ...




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  • Dapigster
    August 17

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    Amazing, as always. I can't say much that I haven't said before. Wow, and kudos. I'll just add that the rhyme scheme is unique and the words beautiful and well-chosen... I must sound trite, having said that so many times... but I pride myself on the fact I always mean it. Love it love it love it. Wish I could give more applause. Lovely piece.

    . Rewarded 6


  • Melissa Burns
    August 1

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    Beautiful! I am glad I got a chance to read this poem (I had to read it twice) there are to many good parts to put a little snippet here as my 'favorite' so I will just wrte 'good work!'

  • Shannanagan
    July 14

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    nice write, i ;iked this, truely and honestly i did, realy like the picture too, it's very pretty, keep the pen flowing

  • crazymomma
    July 7

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    LOL! my man always asks why I love him so the last line made me think of him. I really enjoyed the excellent use of assonance in this. I don't believe I have ever seen it done so well.

  • Night Hope gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    "She dreams beyond the veil this tale
    to share where all mundane
    may shed away, hope's gleam won't fail
    to soothe away past pain."

    First of all, dear Scribe, my apologies. I have been terribly remiss in not having properly commented on this beautiful penning before now. Sighhh...Life got so busy (as you know) & I forgot to come back & leave you a petal or two. I hope you know how wonderful I think this is, how incredible I think you are...as a writer & as a Friend. Once more, you impress. Always, you do. Thank you for having written this, Jonathan. Wanda

    'Your careless gifts of a moment,
    like the meteors of an autumn night,
    catch fire in the depth of my being.'

    'I came to offer thee a flower,
    but thou must have all my garden ~
    It is thine.'

    'The shade of my tree is for passers-by,
    its fruit for the one for whom I wait.'

    'I leave no trace of wings in the air,
    but I am glad I have had my flight.'

    'My last salutations are to them
    who knew me imperfect and loved me.'

    'There are seekers of wisdom and seekers of wealth,
    I sing thy company so that I may sing.'

    'The sky sets no snare to capture the moon,
    it is her own freedom which binds her.'

    'The light that fills the sky
    seeks its limit in a dew~drop on the grass.'

    'Your voice, free bird, reaches my sleeping nest,
    and my drowsy wings dream
    of a voyage to the light
    above the clouds.'

    "When death comes and whispers to me,
    'Thy days are ended',
    let me say to him, 'I have lived in love
    and not in mere time.'
    He will ask, 'Will thy songs remain?'
    I shall say, 'I know not, but this I know
    that often when I sang I found my eternity.'"

    ~ Rabindranath Tagore, excerpts from "Fireflies"

    source: http://www.terebess.hu/english/tagore5.html


  • Undying Resolution
    October 29, 2007
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    very nice write, thankyou for entering and i wish you luck!

    <333


  • Providence
    September 5, 2007
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    In some cases I find the comments as interesting as the poems...ie..." so mystically unattainable in this day and age".

    No doubt the words you've written come from the heart and whatsoever the heart strives for it shall attain!

    Wonderful Writing, Jonathan...
    as always!

    Marianne


  • waydownuponjoy
    September 4, 2007

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    Serenity exposed

    Your poem has captured feelings that are so desired and yet seem so mystically unattainable in this day and age, as life hurries one on with those things that 'must be done' while forgetting the rewards reaped by making time to just fly free. A lovely poem and although the contest asked for 'no rhyme' I feel that your poem was well shared and did justice to the painting. joy


    • Night Hope gold member
      September 4, 2007
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      Just to clarify, I had already removed the "no rhyme" rule shortly after posting it; it was basically a copy/paste statement from my last PIF contest. So, Jonathan is well within the scope of the contest rules.
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