i like the way you smile,
the way it brights up the room.
i like the way you laugh,
its music to my ears.
i like the way you smile,
even when all seems lost.
i like the you hug me,
after we have fought.
i like the way we talk,
like there's nothing else that matters.
i like the you give,
even if you don't receive.
i like the way you cry,
then smile because you know its silly to be sad.
i like the way we both crave chocolate,
and will do anything to get it.
I like the way you are alway there,
it makes me feel safe
i love the way you love me....
i love you too.
Author notes
For my friend. you know who your are. everyone else this is for all great friendships across the globe.
A contest entry
- Food for the Famished Mind (NEED MORE ENTRIES!- ENTER!) by Shahrazad.
900 points, ended September 12, 2007, 19 entries
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Yea if you like comment.. simple =)
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Awwww, I loved this! I love the simplicity and straightforwardness, because it gets the heartwarming message across so wonderfully. Really, this is a fantastic entry, and I can't thank you enough!
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ITS: a possessive. ("The tree lost its leaves.")
IT'S: it is. ("It's too late to change anything.")
Please learn the difference.
Overall, I wasn't a fan of the poem. It's a nice tribute to your friend, but it's very simplistic in terms of style and diction, and I was looking for something complex and stylistically superior to 99% of the "art" on this site. This poem is, no offence meant, average. The repetition of "I like..." doesn't help, either.
This is, in no way, horrid or even bad. It just doesn't stand out.
Peace,
Cristina -
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each to his own
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Certainement, d'accord.
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I like this poem a lot it flows nicely and it's very sweet though it's almost hard to detect that fine line between friendship and a relationship, it's great though, good luck^^
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I just got a message from you; all it said was "ok...."
I don't know what that was for, so if you'd like to enlighten me, that would be great. Did I remove your poem from my contest, and you were wondering why? Let me know.
Elizabeth -
Great
A fab poem, good luck! -
applause because... I can
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Tis very sweet... I liked the chocolate line because it was random and plus I crave chocolate . There were a couple of typos but those can be easily fixed. Thanks for entering the contest!
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