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Don't Disappear On Me

Curled up, alone
Listening to the lullaby
Of your heavy breathing
On the polar-opposite side of this loveless bed
It's been twelve nights since the
Last time you dared to touch me
It's been twenty three days and four hours
From the last time you said you loved me
You are apathetic, unwilling to even
Look into my pleading eyes
You are silent, not offering
Any form of communication
To let me know that you are still alive
To signal that you are still awake
That some part of the person I adore
Remains deep inside of you somewhere
I clutch these arctic sheets
Tears seeping through my shut lids
Please, please tell me
What I did to lose your love

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  • BenziRae
    November 22, 2007

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    Um...Wow...
    Simply put...This was a powerful piece of poetry. Wonderful vocabulary, amazing flow, over all a true pleasure to read.


  • Ephiphany
    October 11, 2007
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    wonderful write

    great lyrics of true feelings here
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  • Beautyfull-x-Angel
    September 17, 2007
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    an emotional poem i hope its not a persoanl one thanx an good luck


  • Hebz
    September 13, 2007

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    WOW!!

    Kool, just hope it's not true...

    but really i felt it to, lol...


    Thnx alot for entering & Best Of Luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    September 4, 2007
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    I would have liked a bit more imagery but still, the emotion in this is palatable. Nicely done.

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