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The Leaves of Change

When the world is gone and nothing is right,

and animals disappear with fright,

 

One tree still stands against the sands of time.

 

It was seeded long ago,

when the world was still to grow;

 

When the earth was green and the tree had friends,

it didn't have to make ammends.

 

Then the people fled,

and the Earth was like a block of lead.

 

The trees died out, the birds ceased to cry,

in their home up in the sky,

 

But the tree still stood,

I told you it would,

and the friends it once had

were long ago dead,

 

Then one day a new hope came,

same as the one that flew away,

The tree's hope had come again,

Like the one that had always been, 

 

And the tree was so joyful on that happy day,

that it now had friends with whom to play.

 

It made the world bloom over again,

and the wind blew against the tree like an old friend.

 

The animals came back--plants and trees did too,

and the birds again came and then it was through,

 

And then when autumn came once more,

the wind blew the leaves to forest floor.

And these my friend, my king, my leige, 

were once again The Leaves of Change.

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  • Kingchess33
    September 2

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    I like this poem a lot. It makes me think about humankind leaving earth, then one day comeing back and fixing it back up. It's good to know that the tree managed to survive the whole thing! Must be a california redwood... XP


  • Lively Matter
    November 9, 2007

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    Awesome write! definate winner in my book! Can't wait to read the next poem ^_^ then I am going to go read your brothers lol your awesome dude keep em coming!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^_^


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    September 19, 2007

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    10 years old!!! I have only one comment, keep writing, this is wonderful and I am completely impressed by this...


    thank you so much, i'll have to read more of you


    al


  • Cat gold member
    September 14, 2007

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    i think you have done just a fabulous job with this poem- i hadnt read you before and of course i went to find your author page and i am nothing short of amazed that you are just 10 years old. There are writers in their 50's on this site who don't write as well as you do.
    "And then when autumn came once more,

    the wind blew the leaves to forest floor."

    this is such a nice line- i love the alliteration of forest floor.

    i am not sure that the earth was a block of lead stanza works.. you could almost eliminate it and lose nothing - and the poem would sound better i think.


    nicely done-

    a pleasure to find in this contest
    m


  • Cherokee
    September 4, 2007
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    I love trees.


  • Eternal-Jammy-Jam
    September 4, 2007
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    really goooooooooooooooooooooood


  • nichtmich silver member
    September 3, 2007
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    This is absolutely beautiful! It encourages us to never, ever lose hope and stand steadfast against those leaves of change. My favorite parts are ~ a new hope came, same as the one that flew away ~ It was seeded long ago; when the world was still to grow. Wonderful imagery and a beautiful message, my favorite combination. Best wishes!


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    September 3, 2007
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    please reread the contest rules, some additional ones were added, thanks...

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    You should be proud of yourself. A very nice write.
    Thanks for sharing. Good job.
    Brian

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