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Hell On Earth.

The moon casts,
A silhouette of darkness,
That I live in.
As the darkness consumes,
My wretched body,
Only my soul will live.

It walks this hell on earth,
This place so horrible,
That people ridicule you,
For what your appearance is.

I have this sickness,

I am obsessed with,

The hurting in this life that I live.

 

As my soul roams this earth,

I come to find,

We of the same come together,

To disassemble you hellions.

 

We will conquer all in the end,

We will rise to the power of this place,

We are the once that once was disgraced,

We will be the ultimate rulers of this time.

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beautifuldisasterxx/ i loved the lines about laughing at the lie, and blaming it on dad

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  • JOSHv3
    September 4, 2007

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    Thank you for your entry and reading the rules...i really enjoyed reading this poem it really made me think...Good luck in the contest!!


  • DeepDarkDesire
    September 4, 2007

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    Draws you in

    The first stanza is my favourite.
    When I read this poem I see a journey across the page, as if your searching for familiarity. Your words are chosen well and I must say you've placed them excellently. Of course I can relate to this like a lot of other people, but to know it relates to me adds a perk. Brilliant start to a contest. great work poet


  • Ocean Gurl
    September 3, 2007

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    Excellent!!!!!!!!

    Amazing write my friend!! You did a really great job on this piece!!!!!!!! Keep up with the great work!!


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    September 3, 2007

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    ok hell yeah great writing glad you asked me to read this a few lil things I'd change but overall great writing (: