Spinning clockwise
Flesh integrated in a UDP slipstream
Wishes converted to bits and packets
She manifests a beastly persona
Navigating slipshod corridor
Wet with copper-infused plasma
Uncanny valley blurred and decimated
Tactical analyses complete
The data meant to confound, unraveled
Anthropomorphic realization giving life
Tendrils of geometric biology
Extending to extremities now reddending
Forcing comparison to binary logic
Unraveling confused sensitivity
CRC check giving way to burgeoning EKG sine waves
Joints hiss and whirr as eye sockets rotate
Life begins
Author notes
Robotics, AI
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Very witty (if I understood it, that is). You lead us aloneg until the very end. The last line was perfect.
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I have no idea what- so -ever about the subject, but it is a good read all the same. It kept my attention from beginning to end and painted a very appropriate image as I read.
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i wont pretend i under stood every word but i got the gist of it and enjoyed reaing this very original poem, well done.
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I love the simplicity of your first and last line. It ties it all togetherr, then you go into the detailed complexities within the centre and that gives your piece great definition. Excellent write!
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the line "wet with copper infused plasma" wow is all I can say. You have such a way with words. Your vocabulary is stunning and you can paint a picture in such a way that it appears to come as second nature. Beautifully done. ~mandie~
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Like your poem:
The data meant to confound, unraveled
Very well written.
John -
wow
again, i'm blown away by your language... and a little shocked at my own response to this... the line "wet with copper infused plasma"... hm. phew. and "geometric biology"... amazing. The only line I didn't like was the second to last line, it seemed a little trite after the depth of the other lines...
amazing. must have more!
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I love the last line of this poem. And that it's shorter than all the rest. Like it doesn't need anything else. (And it doesn't.)
The images are great, but I almost want a bit more explanation. They come on top of each other so quickly it's a bit difficult to discern what's going on.
Beautiful piece, though. Thank you for sharing.
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u can tell that a lot of thought has been but into this poem good job
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i like it.
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holy living fuck, you made computers into art. hats off.
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Ah, so this would be the highly cynical, technical interpretation of what happened around the end of Dicotyledon.
Coincidence?
Clever write with a well throught out metaphor (also making a comment on the state of society I see?), although a very heavy read.
Cheers,
=> Jess
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the first 9 lines were interesting then it just became too laboured, pardon the pun! It does succeed in projecting the lack of feeling in a mechanically controlled living environment, wether that was intentional I don't know, but if the feelings aren't engaged in some way it makes for hard reading, for me anyway.
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what an extreme portrayal of the birthing process. nice work.
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omg
That was nothing short of amazing. I really felt this one. It wasn't just oh makes sense, sounds good, liked it. I was actually into this one completely. I was fully taken away by this one. I really want to thank you for writing it because I loved reading it. Amazing work!
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This was a bit much for me...
But interesting
different
Becky
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intriguing...
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i really like this poem, i can not wait to read your others ox
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This is a really great poem. Great write!!
s
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you, me, malformed fetuses, now... LOL!
Nice.
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No, Uchi, no! My Mongoloid babies!
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NO! Me First!!! :O
I do NOT take sloppy seconds, you may proceed when I am done!
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No way, José!
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*RUNS FULL TILT!!!*
*PUMMELS TTP* HA!
Who ever gets to'em first!!! HAHAHA!!!
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*shanks Uchi with a wooden spoon* My Mongoloid babies, ho!
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that sounds more like life ended lol...
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Dude...
It looks like a thesaurus vomited all over my computer screen.
Great write, homie.
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lol
I despise thesaurusi.
Do not use them.
That was not a statement of fact.
It was an imperative sentence, with you being the implied subject. -
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Oh, I love imperatives. So forceful.
Just kidding. That sounded so wrong in retrospect. Oh, well.
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I like this
for one of your more serious writes lol
Even if it's not serious
but you should title the poem Naughty Ebonics
that would make it righteous.
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