A lifetime of darkness,
makes a day of light
seem like the biggest thing
that ever might
possibly happen
but it will still be this way
darkness for a lifetime
light for a day.
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Wow! This is so deep. I love this write so much. It has so much depth to it. Each line is amazing. Great write.
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It makes quite a statement. A reality for those who suffer a Major Depressive Disorder. They do have those occaisional bright spots, do seem to live a lifetime of darkness. I am sure those who suffer this affliction will se themselves here, for sure. A very deep write... Ithica
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Incredibly Deep
I'm going to agree with daisybee. A lot in a few words...Seriously, I mean, it was so to th point, and yet still...it leaves you wondering, you know? Yeah...of course you do, but really...Amazing.
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Outstanding
This is just amazing. Your word describe a feeling that is often reality. Thanks for the read and keep on writing -
impressive
this seems a really lonely poem, that said a lot with few words. I liked it a lot these lines especially-
darkness for a lifetime
light for a day.
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thank you. I was going to make it longer, but I don't think i need to. It just randomly popped into my head one day. Don't you love it when that happens?
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