We are
parchment
made beings
Waiting
for the ink
to stain our sheets
Written September 3, 2007
Author notes
Prompt: "Genius might be the ability to say a profound thing in a simple way." - Bukowski
A contest entry
- PIF - quote inspired by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended September 6, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie Quest ~ Prewrite Party 2 by Namita.
300 points, ended October 6, 2007, 95 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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yes.
I do feel like this.
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This is fantastic, very profound I must say,
beautiful little write,
well done on yer trophies,
Alex.
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so much said in such a short piece. well done!!!
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Great poem--one that says so much by the lines between!
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This is excellent, I love the metaphor, so much can be taken from this piece.
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I love this-- down to earth and poetically genius
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Absolutely brilliant.
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This was very good. I can relate to this in every life. Well done deserving of two shiny things.
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Simplicity illuminates. This was not simple, just clear. TY for your comments, I'll read on.
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An excellent piece. A well deserved trophy.
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i like short poems like this one and poet who could write one with just so little words could make an impact to a thought or feelings you want to convey.
for me it's concise enough to express your thoughts
and yes!
Waiting
for the ink
to stain our sheets
i really like this one
you made the words so powerful in a thought provoking way
galing!
Anna Lee
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I loved it, but feels a little too short, I feel it should be added to. As most quickies appear ended but I feel this one would benifit from being added onto it.
Much luck
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Excellent write of potency you have penned here. Thought provoking really, and indeed mysterious in its poignant tongue!
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Excellent....
So few words ....so much said.....nicely said...ttfn
Laurel
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Great
You:-
We are
parchment
made beings
Waiting
for the ink
to stain our sheets
Me:-
Yeah I know what you mean!
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Wonderfully succint piece of writing here. Loved the metaphor of paper too...you've applied it in a fresh and creative way. Wonderful poetry.
~ Nicolette
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Woohoo. Love it. You are at my party with a shiny new dress. And I liking it. Good luck!
Luv,
~Candy
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Sounds like a virgin in waiting I have to smile. A woman thought I suppose.
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Wonderfully stated...Love the parchment phrase...Congrats on the bronze!
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excellent, very strong statement, enjoyed this very much!
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This is really good. Love how it's very short but very powerful. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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Creative? Brilliant? This is like an orphan breeze on a dead summer day. Well expressed.
Good luck!
-Esha
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yeah, like the stains often bring life's excitements...lol...
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Wow. These are the kinds of poems that I love...short, but powerful and full of meaning...
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Review (Personal)
Life as a piece of paper
By Virgoan
We are
parchment
made beings
Waiting
for the ink
to stain our sheets
Review:
About the form:
For my opinion there are no problem with the form. The flow was good and with unity. The poem itself handles many implied ideas like what was discussed above. Proper choose of words, simple and understandable. The title was a good attention caller.
Overall the write was simple but meaningful and enjoyable to read.
About the write:
Dignity
Dignity is the first moral idea that is inside this short write.
As humans we have dignity that we protect and one mistake this dignity will dissapear.
Persona
Personality, first of all this the most direct explanation.
A person even though had a good personality and deeds, because of the eyes of prejudice and expectations of the public; One mistake this person is in trouble…
A clean paper with a small ink mark: What will be easily notice? The whole white paper or the markings.
Bank of Knowlegde and Wisdom
Like a paper, the writings or markings that will be embed to it is the lessons that help to develop the understanding of what is life.
Student
We are students waiting to learn new things.
Ang Lim
AKA MBMPJSAL
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the title of this poem caught my eye just as i clicked in the poem i have just commented on - this makes me think of the little motto i used to have, spill ink and laugh
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I dont know about geniuses but the poem here is absolutely wonderful! It reminds me of many things.. This write makes us sound so full of hopeful possibilities and yet delicate.. The usage of the word 'parchment' for people is very interesting.. suggests old wisdom to me.. The poem reads like the collective unconscious starting anew chapter..
Also reminds me a similar saying like your quote prompt- 'The wise person knows how little he knows' (Socrates).
Joyful reading.. enjoyed it very much.. thank you
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13 words and this much power.
I'm impressed.
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Damn, I didn't realize this was for my contest while I was browsing.
This is excellent, you are able to say so much in so many ways -
and believe me when I say, I feel this. I know this down to my very toes. Excellent.
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