Does time wrap itself in moments of speed,
and carry us wayward into destiny?
Or lavish our spirits with all we need,
and play itself out like shaped fantasy?
Do the hands that twist fate, mold and sculpt days
with the richness of Earth and simple things?
Or leave us to bask in selfish displays,
whine, and complain when consequence stings?
Shapeless and formless, this destiny’s lot,
on the road to forever and a day
Or is it that vision I once forgot
past the horizon where fate’s held at bay
Does not the reason for all of these things
shadow the heartache of reality’s ploy?
Or is it the season to take up wings
and fly in the face of old Satan’s joy?
Where fear has no place in this heart of hearts,
and nothing can stop what is set for me.
Whether right or wrong not one can impart,
the splendor of life, that I foresee.
In sickness and health I strive to be best,
glad change will erupt when the time is right.
I'll welcome the stranger as my house-guest,
and share emphatically truth, love, and light.
In the light of your moon I will set sail,
daring the tempest, the future unseen
For what lies behind that black velvet veil
is only a secret to those who don’t dream
With fear a companion, death, an old friend
onward I journey ‘cross deep ocean waves
Willing to pay the full price for my sins
knowing salvation is two arms away
Author notes
Stanzas 1 & 2 poetryality
Stanzas 3 & 4 leo2
Stanzas 5 & 6 poetryality
Stanzas 7 & 8 leo2
A contest entry
- STAR SEARCH ~~COLLABORATION CONNECTION~~ MEN REPORT HERE.... I and Griswold will connect you with another for collab purpose only. ACCEPTING NO MORE ENTRIES, WE ARE FULL. by PassionsPromise.
900 points, ended September 11, 2007, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I am really impressed with all the work you put into this poem. This is wonderfully written wonderful flow. I loved it!
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wonderful job here.
I was impressed with it. Of course i knew you two would bring forth something great.
goodluck to you both, i am just loving the outcome of this contest.
Scott and Tory
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Two beautiful voices together, nothing can go wrong here
Knowing the work of both of you, I can only say that it's a pleasure to see this collaboration.
An excellent work of blended poetry
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What can I say that has not already been said? I just went with it and it was seamless. Thank you for the read.
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This is a fantastic collab. The depth of the piece is something to be expected from poets like you. I loved the second half of this even more than the first. I felt like I could sing soul into this piece. You guys really know a thing or two about rhythm and rhyme. As always, this was a pleasure to read.
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An excellent job from you both, Leo. It's hard to see where one stops and the other begins. Great work. Patricia
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Nice poem you two!
It was hard to tell who wrote what and when but I went on reading and your poem and thoughts gelled into one nice poem! Congratulations are in order to both of you for some great teamwork! Good luck in the contest! joy
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well developed thoughts. conclusions submitted as questions. i like this form of education. the answer lies within the reader and makes each question relevant to all. the ideas expressed through the first stanzas questions brought a great deal of thought to me. forced me to wrestle with all of those really broad issues. my favorite stanza: In the light of your moon I will set sail,
daring the tempest, the future unseen
For what lies behind that black velvet veil
is only a secret to those who don’t dream
excellent write
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Lovely collaboration ...
you two! I can guess that Renee loved this collaboration -- you are such a gentleman and a very natural writer. And of course she is brilliant, too!
Congratulations and love to the both of you.
Myra
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What a simple breeze it was to work with you Leo. It seems that more often than not we are on the same page. (pun intended) Best of luck sweetheart of a man!
Always ♥
Renee
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