Beauty and Elegance
All that you show
Your dark cold thoughts
No one will know
Twinkling blue eyes
With hatred beneath
Behind smiling lips
You're gritting your teeth
You walk on by
Like life is a breeze
You strike me a glare
That makes my heart freeze
You bat your eyelashes
And give me a grin
Your eyes let me know
That your cackling within
It won't be long
After all of this spite
I'll finally get back
You'll be dead and snow white
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This is good.... I love the ending, not what I expected when I read the title of snow white. This shows creativity and a little penned up resentment...?
Thank you for the entry.
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wow this was really good! I think it was interesting how you wrote it but it added to the whole effect.I have to say I especially liked the start and end of your poem! very well written.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Hmm...Victoria again? Great use of title in this one, just one little thing:
Your gritting your teeth
You're instead of Your.
I thought this was inspired by "Snow White Queen" by Evanescence when I saw the title. Was it? I've never heard the song.
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Actually we were supposed to pick a title for a contest and I picked snow white.
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Ok. Nevermind.
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And yes, its about Victoria. How did you know? Lol
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I have no idea. Maybe it was all the hatred and murder...Maybe not. lol.
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