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Esther

From whence the king hath set forth roy’l decree
Loyal servants come before him in assemblage
They come before him on bended knee
With bowed heads and adoring language

In the name of the King a task is at hand
Lest Vashti arise to the royal throne
Go! Seek the finest virgins in the land
For the king wishes not to rule alone

Virgins were sought seeking beauty within
For that which is seen may be purified
And which pleases the king soon to begin
The perfect queen to be exemplified

Yea, Esther was found and brought to the king
She was crowned queen for her beauty to bring

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Esther chapter two in the Bible, relates the story of how the king was not happy with Vashti and ordered his servants to find a perfect queen. Beauty within was the goal for a woman could be made to look beautiful to appearance. Esther was both.

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  • penman gold member
    September 11, 2007
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    Excellent

    Very well done. You captured part of the story of Esther so well. And in a very skillful manner.


  • Desire gold member
    September 5, 2007

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    Wow!!

    What a tale You have told and Love the form You have told this one in
    Form Queen
    Beautifully presented like all Your pieces are
    and I was at the edge of my seat~
    not wanting this to end

    Loved it!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • be a circle
    September 4, 2007

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    Ahh the story of Esther. This is a lovely poem describing her. 'For her beauty to bring' foreshadows all she will do for her people, and all that she is that will echo into eternity. Than ks for entering and best of luck!


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 4, 2007

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    You wrote this so well, I didn't need the notes to see the vision. Excellent use of imagery, and beautiful word flow, first stanza caught me right away, and the ending perfect! Thank you for an enjoyable read!


  • PerVirtuous
    September 4, 2007

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    I don't know... I think you can find plenty of women of inner beauty without requiring virginity, but that's just me... This is a great take on a historical sonnet. I love using the form for such storytelling, and you have mastered it here.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    Amera, very nicely done and it can even relate back to ~pearls of life~, we both seem to be in the same emotional grove today, but yes,with this write you hath set forth your own roy’l decree.



    Dad


  • HaleyMary
    September 3, 2007

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    Beautiful write. Interesting story that goes with the poem, too. I've never read that story in the Bible.
    I liked this poem because it made me think of how beauty should be looked for within a person and not just the outward appearance. Good luck in the contest.


  • LadyLavender gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    Amera, what first captured me was the title...Esther being my middle name. Truly never cared for the name till I read about Queen Esther.

    This write is beautiful at all levels.


  • Swan song gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    Excellent history lesson. Woman that are both beautiful and intelligent are tantalizing They are a pure turn on to any man half way worth his salt.
    Excellent poem!


  • anaisnais
    September 3, 2007
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    Aaaaggghhhh a beautiful fairy tale in itself no less!!!


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    Know of this woman through OES so was easy to follow this poem through from beginning to end. Lovely sonnet used to share this story with us all.


  • Tercil gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    loveliness itself

    This is so canny, that Esther was the story from whence my story came, how she was chosen from the harem for the king, of all the stories in the bible, this is the one I am knowledgable of all. Well done bringing it out of the blue and presenting your own arrangement. Lovely,


  • Whoochi gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    Love the Chapter on Esther...very good form queen Dollface! Best of luck! This is as beautiful as you!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    Amazing,

    I love your works teach! I really, really do!
    If I had a dozen shiny red apples,
    I'd give them to ya! (Brownie points Included)
    Thanks for sharing your works here,
    my honor to read ya! All the best in this contest!


    -Timothy aka poeticweaver


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    Spellbinding...
    this is the first word
    that came to my mind
    after reading this beautiful
    sonnet...Amera, you are so
    very very talented. Love, Lane


    • Amera gold member
      September 3, 2007
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      Aww.. you're such a wonderful sister. Your comments make it a pleasure to write.

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