will you marry me?
huh
whoa
no
you want me
but will not marry me?
so?
I do not want you
and will not marry you
oh?
yes oh!
whatever
... so get your teeth out of my vein
I will send back deoxygenated blood
delivered by capillaries
collected by venules
redirected through vena cavae
to get rid of your poisonous pain ...
depart from my heart --
go!
huh whoa ... no!
Author notes
Well -- I love a challenge!
In a list
A contest entry
- Darken Us Up with Your Comedic Genius and Romantic Attitude by So Strange.
1000 points, ended September 7, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I enjoyed this, as well, because it was funny, romantic and dark in different ways than most of the writes in this contest. I can't wait to find out who you are so I can read more stuff...
Keep up the good work and good luck in my contest! -
Power through poetry is in your life's blood. I've been feeding on it for these past 4 years. If that makes me a vampire.... move over Dracula. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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great piece. good luck in the contest.
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Oh! This is a fun poem... so easy to read and it went so fast. They most likely weren't the right "type" for each other anyway! Thanks for the smile!
Love,
Amera♥
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This was fun to read and I bet it was fun to write as well
good luck in the contest!
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ROFLMAO!! Now this was different is every wonderful way imaginable (okay - perhaps a little hyperbole - but excuse me ... I 'am' an aspiring poet) - such a clever pen you have. I shall steal the ink for my vast cave of bookmarkings, to savour again whenever I wish. No! - I'm sorry, the decision is not yours to make. I am but a petty vampire intent on draining such talent
*But no, I won't marry you*
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lol
Vampirism is a great metaphor for these leeches we meet from time to time. They are a never-ending drain, but very difficult to shake off. The dialogue shows how dim the leech is. Good luck!
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Wow,
I'm sure you'll do well in this contest my wonderful friend, what a clever piece... and such a great unique form and flow. Thanks for sharing, pen on poetess!
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