wave
slaps
rock
with
curling
kiss;
water’s
a myriad of
marble-shards
creating
sand-people who
cartwheel
beneath
electric blue
maelstrom
blankets.
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie ~ 20 words by Namita.
390 points, ended September 5, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-write Party ~ Closes In One Day by Namita.
300 points, ended October 1, 2007, 90 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie Quest ~ Prewrite Party 2 by Namita.
300 points, ended October 6, 2007, 95 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments are most welcome.
Comments
1 - 5 of 5
-
LOL. Three contests. Three are mine. WEIRD... And i'll just repeat my old comment lol/
Luv,
~Candy
-
Like I said before I love nature poems. But I really can’t write like this. I hope one day I will be able to produce something THIS descriptive and vivid. I liked how the “wave slaps the rock with curling kisses” I could just see those words in my head… for a quickie and 20 words max you sure know how to express it beautifully.
-Have a good one
Blanche
-
I've commented before, I just have the same to say. Beautiful. And thanxx for entering.
Luv,
Candy
-
For a quickie this is very descriptive and I like the way its been put down. Well done! Good luck!
-
Great penning .Good luck in the contest and thanxx so much for enterring.
Luv,
Candy,
Contest Holder
Adding your comment:
1 - 5 of 5
