Is it really wise...
To tempt yourself with something you cannot have?
But is it dumb..
To try and forget it all together?
Is it normal when you know...
That you cannot control how you feel?
Can it be wrong..
To feel that way, when the tears fall?
Is it naive of me...
To not know what my heart wants?
Or am I being deceived..
By my own mind?
Is it possible...
To live without someone
Who's never left your heart?
I believe that your decision is your own
You control what happens to you
And your future
Through your own opinions, thoughts & decisions
But answer me this, my friend
Is it wise?
Or is it dumb?
Is it right?
Or is it wrong?
To miss someone.. so deeply..
When they do not feel the same?
Author notes
It's been seven months since the break up... Though I tell myself and my friends I have put it behind me with my head strong, I cannot help but feel so weak without him. I still talk with him, determined to try just being friends... but I can't help but feel something for him still.. Is it right to feel this way?
A contest entry
- does it hurt..... ? by DancingRain1692.
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I have myself been left in this situation, && i hate it, && i'm starting to feel a bit, idk, silly for wanting him still, when i know he treated me like rubbish, but i still long for him.
anyways, this really conveyed your emotion && the confusion etc, thanks for entering, && good luck in my contest [=
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This is perfect...I love this. You've written something I can truly relate to. My heart really goes out to you on this one; there's nothing wrong with this poem, so I am really speechless at what to say.
I too am in a similar situation as this. My then girlfriend and I broke up and it really hurt me, because even though we wern't together long, for the first time ever, I was happy. I think about her 24/7, I see her most days at school either walking about or bumping into her occasionally...but I miss her. Everything i'm supposed to be good at just went down hill after we broke up; exams, rugby, athletics...I just couldn't focus and I still think of her. I can truly empathise with the talking part...we used to talk so freely with each other, about music, martial arts, and everything else...I really miss those converstaions, and I miss being with her. If I had a second chance, I would take it, because the thought of making her happy makes me happy. There are so many songs that remind me of her...I just get really weak inside.
Sorry...I digress a bit there.
Immense poem, best of luck in the contest.
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this is sad, the poem that rings so true for so many, and the story behind it. There is nothing worse than losing someone you love so much. Be strong! This is a beautiful poem, you have a talent that I do not and that is being able to put words into feelings. I love it.
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Ah bittersweet. Sweety, you just need to let go. Move on and get past it. Just take those memories and hold them close to your heart. savor them for one more minute then let them slip through your fingers. Let them rest in your heart. Life goes on. Time will heal the hurt and eventually someone else will come along and wipe away the past hurt with love. You may never stop loving the first one, but I believe you never get over anything. You get past it. You hope. There is always a hello after every good bye. thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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You can miss someone, when they don't miss you. It jurts but it hapens. This is beautiful. But to be blunt, this is just not what I am looking for in my contest, thanks anyway. This poem is beautiful, but just not for my contest.
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yes. My advice to you is to try to hide how you feel for him, so you do not risk losing him as a friend as well. If he still wants to talk to you and hang out with you, he probably feels the same way, and perhaps just doesn't want a relationship right now...or soemthing. I'd just keep it on a friends level, move on with your life, and maybe in a while something more will develop. And if not, you'll have a friend.
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To miss someone.. so deeply..
When they do not feel the same?
You have stated the story of the love..I can relate with it..this happens..what the soulution is.. nothing..except to wait and watch..you are quite true here..well done....
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This is such an amazing poem with so much feeling and depth. You have asked such valid questions that I suppose only time can tell. I hope it all works out for you.
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It is ok to feel this way. I just broke up with a guy and sometimes I miss him too much for words. The way he smiles and laughs and seems so carefree. Keep strong though, and look at some new guys
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I love this and can relate so much. However we've never dated because I've never told him how I felt. I hope things get better for you. Great job.
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it is normal
i think this is a really good piece.... keep up the work.
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wow. amazing. theres not much more 2 say its GREAT!! adding 2 finialist list.
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