The old man stood inside his lab, the work was finally done
Within a glass enclosure laid his new genetic son
A lifetime spent researching how to clone a perfect cell
Splicing genes and DNA, he'd done it all so well
The knowledge of the ages he had placed within that brain
It didn't matter that his colleagues thought he was insane
Many years had come and gone since the day his work began
Creating from his own ideals the superlative man
Appreciation for the arts he put inside the head
Not a misstep would he make, just gracefulness instead
Strength and beauty he would have, no man would be his equal
Once the world had seen him they would clamor for a sequel
Mastery of the sciences would flow within his veins
Free of greed and lustfulness he’d never know those pains
His Adonis would be lauded; he could hear the rousing cheers
And as creator he’d be revered there among his peers
The being then began to stir and opened up its eyes
It sat up on the table and the old man watched it rise
As his creation crossed the room and gave him an embrace
The old man noticed a dull look upon the creatures face
Then lifting his creator, there came forth a loud sharp crack
As the newly risen being smiled and broke the old man’s back
Something there was missing and the creation wasn’t whole
What the old man could not give it, was a tender loving soul
A contest entry
- Create a Mad Scientist by fantasysmurf.
777 points, ended February 16, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very nice
Thank you for your entry. I enjoyed it very much. The rhyme was perfect and had a touching end. Thank you for sharing this poem. Now it is off to judge...
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Ah sir, what a fine poem! YES!
Do we love sci-fi? YES! And the visitors of Poetry Planet will be delighted with this poem... so I am whisking it off to The Planet! Thank you so much for sharing your fine talent with the world. 
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As a sci-fi fan I find this poem very intersting and makes me think about how much we play with genetics in our modern world. It somehow seems strange that we try to create a perfect man because if we could do that we might possibly looking at our own demise as humans plus it could make the world a very boring place to live if we were all the same. Scientific developments also come in stages but if we were to create a superlative man it would be crazy to do it without being able to give him as many qualities as possible, especially the good qualities. I really like the thought you've put into this poem and think something along these lines would make a fantastic sci-fi film.
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amazing, the rhythm was fantastic, this had me almost tapping my foot, nice write man
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Brrr, a seriously creepy poem. Although the subject has been treated in several books, I think the dark side in the human nature it is exceptionally well captured here. The embrace, the smile, acts we usually relate to love and caring, are here a followed, and possibly triggered (how does this creature think?) by a horrible murder, although murder might not be the right word for it. It's really the gentleness that's disturbing, it's so misplaced, deceiving and most of all sick. Fantastic work.
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Very creative! I enjoyed reading it.
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This WAS FANTASTIC! I wish i could applaud it but i used mine all up! LOL.... I could picture the whole write... the flow and form were perfect...keep on penning ! peace and harmony...Desi
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Yes indeed only God has that power to create a loving tender soul! Good luck in this contest and have a Happy Labor Day full of love and happiness
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Ohhh...very nice! I wasn't expecting that ending. You had greaet rhyme and great image...this was very good.
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Great story, great rhyme, great rhythm... and entertaining at that. Wondeful job from beginning to end. Nearly flawless!
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This is awesome. The ryhme is almost flawless and it flows so smoooothly.I love the topic as well.
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I wanted more but in fact you have done it all in so few lines, quite brilliant and gorily funny. Serves Prof. Frank N Stein right! Thanks for the read.
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WOW
Intriguing piece here. I am at a loss for words.
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, I very much like it. Especially the end
, very powerful there. The build up is very nicely done, love the transitions. kind of scary too
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Wow...this is such a good write. You told the story really well. It captures the imagination of the reader,wondering what the end would bring. Hmmmm...a monster of a creation indeed. Well done and best of luck in this contest 
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