The petals pink with rosy delight
Against the full moons glare of night
But my eyes see not the blossom as it falls
For my mind is back with you in the halls
Bound by duty we shall never be
If only my stubborn father could see
The way I smiled the day
The to you I gave my heart away
Now all I have is our place to remember
The rotting wood of cherry blossoms in December
The month of which you were last spied
through my tears as I cried
For every Cherry Blossom that falls
I seem to be trapped with only more walls
For you my love, reflected in only a minds memory
Like cherry blossoms, December will be the death of me
Author notes
A freewrite that I love and I just have to post.
A contest entry
- PIF: If You Like It Vague, Click Here by Artemis Gem.
700 points, ended September 23, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is really beautiful. Congratulations on winning the contest.
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Thank you.
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Now all I have is our place to remember
The rotting wood of cherry blosseoms in December
For every Cherry Blossom that falls
I seem to be trapped with only more walls
For you my love, reflected in only a minds memory
Like cherry blossoms, December will be the death of me
ooh I like this--the romance with teh theme of cherry blossoms....very nice! and ish luff cherry blossoms..^.^
very beautifully done! keep it up!
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Thank you so much ^_^
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The sweet petals pink
setting the mood,
and then see it dashed
by the end of the story.
You share the emiotion beautifully,
the reality, the unwilling acceptance.
Well done.
Aesthete
P.S To preserve its beauty
remember to run it thruogh "edit"
to catch the lingering typos.
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All typos should die a horrible death >.<
Thank you for your comments.
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