It’s just that it came so fast.
Sitting in the front row between my best friend (unrelated) and my step-sister (sister of the deceased), I keep thinking about it like it’s a thousand years away.
I’ll stare down at his glossy corpse, and that will be the last I see of it.
But that won’t be for forever.
It’s only the beginning of the service, anyway.
Then suddenly it’s there. Distant relatives and high school buddies file out of the rows behind us, some stopping to offer more condolences to his mother, still others stopping in front of his casket to whisper a short prayer before they move on.
Until it’s just us—the immediate family.
Then, OK, say goodbye to David now. Forget him.
Right now.
Go, do it.
Now.
Author notes
David was my step-brother, until two years ago when he smashed his head in a car wreck.
*R.I.P Destiny*
Option 1
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- Forgotten by The Pedestrian.
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I am very sorry for your loss...the poem was alright however the last lines did nothing for me. Don't get me wrong this is a nice poem...its just thoughs lines sound so wierd with the rest of it. Anyway thank you for entering this contest.
~Jessi~
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Firstly, let me say apologies for the late judgement of this contest, I'm sorry but i really feel this piece was let down greatly by those last 4 lines, untill then it was descriptive but not overbearingly so, vivid in imagery and passional filled. Those last 4 lines killed it for me. All the same though, nice work. Thanks for the entry and best of luck in the contest,
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I'm sorry for your loss
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good write
this write reminds me of how people expect you to forget and not talk about the person anymore ounce the funeral is over. It is heartfelt,I am sorry for your loss I know how hard it is to loose a family member and someone you love. -
I'm sorry for your loss, and positive anything I've been through can't match it. The only feel of understanding I get was the well conveyed feel of the poem. It's not exactly sad, just almost commanding yourself that if you forget, it will be okay. It's blunt, straight to the point, and pretty damn good.
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