He pressed his lips
with linen cloth
and left it laying,
without thought
I saved it
--in pocket of forever
In a list
A contest entry
- your prompt is ................... by Lavender Butterfly.
410 points, ended September 2, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful!
This is a beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing! I could see as the actions were performed in this poem and I could feel the emotion ...Ver well done!
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Wow
here is poem for you
WOW
Your poem is Wow
your writing is wow
this poem is wow
longlife
Great poem! so much emotion in so little words.I loved the ending,in pockets of forever
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Awesome!
This is why they call it GOLD! :D
What a piece my friend, dang. I love it!
Thanks for sharing, and congrates!
Much love, and peace, Timothy :f
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Great description of the emotions and memories we can attach to an object used by someone admired or loved. Perfect line breaks. Satisfying descriptive write!
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You have tapped into that common experience that we all have of transferring emotions to a personal object belonging to someone we care about or admire. I like the way that the cloth was no more that utilitarian to its user but was cherished by the speaker in the poem. The contrast is quite striking and brings a lot of implied emotion into the piece. Excellently written!
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Oh this is so emotionally expressive, but beautiful imagery in such brevity. It is like a lingering memory that weighs heavily on the heart. Gorgeous. Hugs, Bunny
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Oh wow - this touched my heart. What a way with words you have. This is deeply moving and expressive and you have composed such immense feeling in so few words... x
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Great take on the prompt! Wonderful images and thoughts. Thanxx for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Candy
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This is great!
Good luck in contest! Well done.
Write on!
*PEACE*
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