Heart's desire ripped to shreds
Hurt beyond words
Tears gushing like wild rapids
And all I have is..
One tissue
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Ah, a wonderfully symbolic piece. Love the image of 'wild rapids'.
'one tissue' - there's immense feelings of sadness in those two small words.
Perhaps the beginning of each line didn't need to be capitalised - might give a smoother flow.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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I love your words from the beginning to the end. I can also relate to the sad write. Thanks for entering.
LISA
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Thank you very much for the wonderful comment
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I can relate to this it is a very good write.Short and to the point thank you for your entry.Goodluck in the contest.Best wishes
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Very expressive in so few words... x
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Great write.
Write on!
Good luck in contest!
*PEACE*
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So touching and sad. Good job. Good luck to you with this wonderful write.
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This is sad but the last line is very funny, but sad. -_-' Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you
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Welcome.
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