dew on tall grass reflected your shut eyes;
I didn't look behind me-
but the breeze from our lungs swayed fruits,
sending ripe tastes through my nostrils
the sun
stepped towards us with excitement and curiosity,
and as he watched,
my blistered skin melted loose from my bones.
I could feel the entire world inside me then,
as I was blinded
in waves of color and rhythm.
Author notes
hahah I had to edit this because my "s" letter got stuck on the keyboard so instead of saying nostrils it said "nossssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssstrilssssss"
well. I thought it was funny.
A contest entry
- Le Jardin Fruitier by ea.
500 points, ended September 10, 2007, 8 entries
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your right in your notes, that is pretty funny....I really do love and appreciate your free-form style and beautiful description of your feelings and surroundings.
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"the sun
stepped towards us with excitement and curiosity,
and as he watched,
my blistered skin melted loose from my bones."
-i love this line. amazing imagery.
*lys*
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thank you so much!
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Eeep
Princess!
this is amazing
♥
I cannot find a part i love
Without copy && pasting the whole thing
♥
ily
P.S! the "s" thing made me laugh
xxx
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haha
this is amazing
ive missed you & your work, sweetiepieee!
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Gaaaaah this is amaaazing. Like okay one of my favorite poems ever. If I make a list one day, this will be one of them. I ADORE the images here...like GAHH, tutti fruity to the extremeeee ♥. Its just, breathing in the love of someone in all its passion and color and letting it fill you up and bloom inside you, the petals expanding all your organs. & the sunshine, melting you away into them, with so much love and waves of tropical color and you just like, ooze together.
Man this is so fantastic, you have no idea how like enlightened I feel. This should be shared with the world it is so beautious. ♥ you are a meg genius crashums...i can see the palm trees holding their breath on the edges of your mind. So pretty this is really you should be so proud.
o.0 <3<3<3<3<3 xoxox
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aww omg hunnie, you make me proud of myself.. just because you like it!
alksdk
thank you SO MUCH for always being so sweet!!
love youuu!
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haha that is funny, i love this write as well. You're a genius.<3
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