care to cry
care to die
No one wants to be your friend
your hiding, always hiding
from yourself
your so afraid
of life
Never feeling
Never seeing
Believing that it's over
before it can begin
your dying inside and you want to
breathe again
No one's there to see you
to love you
to make you want to live
It's everyday
over and over again
You can't see and you can't believe
that freedom really free
you want to live and feel alive
but time it's running bye
No one's here
to hold you
to hold you
to hold you
tight
Just wanna live
and live alive
wanna breathe
feel the cool air outside
but no's there
and your dying
and your dying
and your dying
all alone
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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YOUR: a possessive ("your cat is evil").
YOU'RE: you are ("you're dying").
There is a difference. It's important to double check your poems after writing them for little mistakes in usage. Spellcheck won't pick up on such mistakes, as 'you're' and 'your' are both correct words, though they can be used in the wrong context.
-Cristina -
I love the emotion in this. I can totally relate to it. Actually, I think that this would make an awesome song! You have a talent, Hope! ^^!
- Misfortune. -
Beautiful...i can really relate to this...i broke up wtih my b/f 3 wks ago and his whole family blamed me for EVRYTHING...so yeah i got over it tho...lol
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