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Glass Heart

The heart can break like a fragile glass,
Without warning it can slip to the floor,
A silent gentle fall without sound or warning,
Until the crash that shakes everyone to the bone,
But slowly...piece by piece you pick it back up,
But unlike the glass a heart can mend and be fixed,
No you can't just throw your heart away like broken glass,

For one man junk is another man treasure!!!

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Irish-Rain

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  • Hebz
    September 11, 2007

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    Very True, you really described sth that i can't express these days...

    Thnx alot for entering & Best of Luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba

  • abba12
    September 5, 2007

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    i love this, its really well done. the first 4 lines are great, the second 4 are good but they seem to loose the rythem a bit. still a good write though. you were right, i like your other poems better


    • Irish-rain
      September 5, 2007
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      hey Abba. The reason for the rythem change is to show the sadness of a broken heart darlin. ty for the info though. it will always be taken into consideration.

  • Bob 42 silver member
    September 4, 2007

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    Great thoughts

    You did a great job in getting your message through,but I believe the word 'throw' in line #7 would be more appropriate

    • Irish-rain
      September 5, 2007
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      Great thoughts

      Thanks for the cach of my ignorance Bob. I appreciate it.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    September 3, 2007
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    I like this
    A silent gentle fall without sound or warning,
    Until the crash that shakes everyone to the bone,
    But slowly...piece by piece you pick it back up,
    But unlike the glass a heart can mend and be fixed,

    Thank you for your entry.Best Wishes


  • CrazyKelsea
    September 2, 2007
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    Awesome.

    This is short and sweet. And very meaningful. I love how you said
    "For one man junk is another man treasure!!!"
    And the line that said.
    "But unlike the glass a heart can mend and be fixed."
    This is a great piece of poetry. I think many people should read this epically the ones who are going through a rough break up or something.



    GREAT JOB!
    <3 Kelsea.


  • HopeWithWings
    September 2, 2007
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    That last line was kinda funny. This is good write filled with truth.


  • katiekills4
    September 2, 2007
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    I really like this, very descriptive :]

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