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VooDoo Love

I feel the prick of a needle
in the center of my chest
My body falls limp,
as he lays me to rest
The heat drives me crazy
as his words burn my skin,
Oh, I wonder, today
what type of pain I will be in.

My arm is killing me
As he drags me across the floor
I beg him to stop
He asks me, "what for?"
I fell bruised and helpless
Whenever we fight
I can barely breathe;
he grips my neck so tight.

He bends me over backwards
Causing my body to ache
He laughs at my tears
Tells me they're fake.
I surrender in silence
I humble myself
I sit in the darkness
Upon his shelf.

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I hope I did Option 4 justice!

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  • peregrin
    July 31, 2008
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    Creative, and I like the idea!
    Good luck in my contest!


  • Unstoppable
    December 13, 2007

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    this poem is awesome. A great write and thank you for entering it in my contest. my favorite part was
    'The heat drives me crazy
    as his words burn my skin,
    Oh, I wonder, today
    what type of pain I will be in.'


  • Hebz
    September 13, 2007
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    Cool

    "I feel the prick of a needle
    in the center of my chest"

    I like these two lines, so much pain tho...

    I also like thw shole piece, there's sth behind it that attracts me, Very good, & WEll done

    N.B:-I hope this's not for real...

    Thnx alot for entering & Best Of Luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba

    • cre8tiv-writer
      September 14, 2007
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      Thanks!

      Thanks you so much for your comment!! I just got out of this relationship actually. I've learned alot needless to say!!


  • LovelyParadox
    September 4, 2007
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    Great

    Job well done with blending reality and mysticism.


  • lostinthevoid
    September 2, 2007
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    this is good

    I really like this,good description of a controlling relationship and so much more,nice flow,has many faucets of emotion ! However for option #4 the title you chose for the contest must be the title of your poem! So please change your title. Thanks for entering this is good! Good luck!

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