A rainbow rose dips through a garland of rapture
Dyed in its vibrant bow once we kiss the calm
Swiftly glowing, held of every parted dreams
Conveying the love that crops upon the sky
He held me in his arms and again it is seen
behind a glass of our love presence
She perches her nose to watch us through
Glistening over the dry weltered pane
I myself want to look for long but my man...
I'm afraid it would end this moment with him
but why is she looking and not at herself?
Indeed she's beautiful, but does she know?
In a list
A contest entry
- To Everyone Lacking Awards by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended March 5, 2008, 61 entries
Silver trophy winner
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A very pretty poem
in images and ideas.
You have the courage of your convictions in placing it in many contests.
Very best wishes, Lyndon.
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I was happy to see you got positive comments on your poem and won that Silver Trophy. Thank you for entering it in my contest.
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Brilliant. This poem paints one of the best mental pictures in my mind. I loved the flow of this poem and the calmenss yet, the roughness of love in it. Some people just can't accept themselves like they should. Great job on this and thank you for entering the contest.
Josh
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some people just naturally can't except themselves its only human. this is a very tallented poem presented here and I love it.
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nicely done!
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This is Beautiful
This is an extremely beautiful piece of work; it has stunning imagery, and paints a glorious picture of two people in love, with a scenic and calm setting. Your poem has a very satisfying meter to it, and it very enjoyable to read, and the picture adds a lot (as well as the color of the background) by way of setting the tone. In your last stanza, I think you captured what a lot of people think about love, and how, no matter how perfect the moment it, there is always that little bit of doubt about yourself and the security of the relationship; saddingly, most insecurities seem to be about oneself, which is actually quite ridiculous.But whatever; I don't mean to rant. It was very beautiful, and I enjoyed reading it.
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you capture my message its really for both way the gurl in the poem is oviously insecure because why would she be so awe for and be disturbed and the rose is oviously jeoulous at their love for she is just watching. Indeed the girl is beautifuul as the man hold her not even looking at the rose but her thinking she is so beautiful and the rainbow rose is truely beautiful as the lady is in awe
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this is one very beautiful write my friend!! the deep emotions just pour out onto the page.I think all of us ladies have felt this type of insecurity that makes us compare ourselves to others' beauty.
a fine piece of poetic art!!!
Silverbutterfly
(Mary)
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Oh how beautiful I love it it paints such a wonderful story
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This is very gorgeous, it's like you're bringing new word to the table each time you come. I guess that's what butified the talent of a marvelous mind. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing. Best of luck to you dear "One."
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Beauty is not to by jugde by the apperance of others, or the false images project to the world, it is ment to be something unique to all and varys for all. From the composting leaves laying on the ground which will nurture the tree the next spring, to the glowing sun sette, all is beauty! Very interesting peice and very well written. It is very deep and its meaning is peaking out of the ever truth proclaiming words you have displayed here. This is one of the most unique peices I have seen on this subject and you did a very good job with it. Great work and good luck in the contest!
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This is not a rewards poem. Fix in 24 hours. Quesdtions? Please let me know!
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lol crystal clear this time through... thank u 4 enlightening me! Personification... of course how could i forget? And now I find it's the perfect situation drawn up to convey your message! Thanx
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Beautiful words... but honestly, I'm not quite sure what it means though I can guess (especially through the other comments left)... still, could you explain your intention... sorry for understanding so little~ thanks 4 the entry either way!
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ohh its basically saying how someone so beautiful is looking at someoneelse as she is insercure about herself. Noone has saw a rainbow rose so that would rare and certainy that rose would be so beautiful. Its bascially a classic type of poem where the rose in personification represents a beautiful women who wishes to be like the two inlvoe couples and a rose doesn't have an eye so it can't see how it looks.
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Lovely feeling through out this piece. The ending really asks question of the strong esteem that all of us needs to embrace. Very good poetic thought!! Thx ~ Mykeee
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thank you
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This is a great poem. Wonderfully written. I love the last stanza. I was not expecting it to end like that. It was so great! Thanks for the read. Keep it up!
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All women are beautiful and this was a great poem. You had me holding my breath while I read it and that last line threw it over the top. I think no matter how good a woman looks she will always find a flaw in herself. Thank you for a great read and keep it flowing.
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Very soft and sensual
write Aurielle, I really like this. You are so wonderful in expression of LOVE. Thanks for displaying your talent.
Ephiphany
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This is just pure poetic beauty. One that shows you have a very unique talent rarely seen. To pen such words with the softest of meaning, yet envisage such a powerfull picture is no easy task, but you have produced a perfect write that will please all who drop in. Thank you for sharing this one with us, pure delight. I see my Sis also enjoyed this, now I'm convinced it was worth looking in. well done.
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A rainbow rose dips through a garland of rapture Dyed in it's vibrant bow once we kiss the calm...Such soft loving words that flows like silk across the tongue...sighs...This is just beautiful
thank you so much for sharing
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thank you
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