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Last Things on Your Mind

Never thought I'd ever see the day
I would ever feel this way
The ice around my heart is melting
There's fire in the way

Now I don't know what to do
Can't stop thinking about you
But I don't need to look to find
I'm the last thing on your mind

I know I'm not top of the list
People you know
                        people you miss
But that doesn't matter 'cos I just need to know
Did I
      ever feature
                        at all?

I just want you to live your life
To gain all for wich you strive
Forget you even heard these sorry words

I know I never had a chance
Can see that with just one small glance
I don't need to look to know that I'll find
I always was the last thing on your mind

I always was the last thing
                                      on
                                          your
                                                mind

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  • DolceVito gold member
    October 24, 2008
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    Beautiful

    ...Excellent write, enjoyable read


  • Kiss the girl--x
    October 15, 2008

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    this was so sad, I loved the formatting of the ending.

    I hope everything gets better for you.

    thanks for entering

    ♥


  • Samantha Marie
    September 29, 2008

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    this is good, but not quite what i was looking for
    you're an amazing writer tho, keep up the good work
    thanks for entering


  • Cerbie20
    August 31, 2008

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    i really like the rhyme in this poem. and it was really good.

    I know I'm not top of the list
    People you know
    people you miss
    But that doesn't matter 'cos I just need to know
    Did I
    ever feature
    at all?

    i like this stanza the most. it looks like to me, a list, like how you said at the top that your not the top of the list, and the at all? is to represent you, a breath of hope to the list. good job!


  • echo-ink
    August 8, 2008
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    Loved the emotion in this, welcome to my family, what member did you want to be?

    Love, Poeticlove, xx


  • sanity
    April 8, 2008

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    awwwwwwww these words are so defeatest.... you should never feel that way..... very emotional and heartfelt..... thank you for sharing ..... good luck...... hugs and love Linda xxxxxx


  • GypsyEyes
    April 3, 2008

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    i really love how you formatted this poem! you did a great job. you thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    Such a heartfelt poem filled with emotions. Which option was this for though? Wonderful write! Best of luck and thanks for entering

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