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A Child In My Mind

When I was a child in my mind
I thought that love holds only beauty
but I never knew that their was so few it held inside

I watered many love pages as these precious
tainted memorable words of moments blossomed green
yet I never knew if these pages were then wet
the words would drip away

and that if when then,
I could plead the sun for help
and he would of brought those moments

of truth and bliss,
sweetly back upon its carriage

So like the water that swelled those pages
so my insecurity swelled those days with him

that he nolonger wanted me...

             I never knew that these pages if wet
                                                the words would then drip away...

If only...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • MourningSun
    December 12, 2007

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    Personally I think the poem is amazing. I just can't make a connection between it and the prompt. it is a great poem though.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    October 26, 2007

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    thank you for this wonderful entry into my make me feel something contest. i am wishing you the best of luck in all your future writings and in this contest of mine as well. viyanna rosemarie


  • edit my world.
    October 21, 2007

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    dont forget to enter your ap name
    but this is beautiful...i love it so much..it captured what i wanted!
    thankies for entering


  • warrior-eagle
    September 23, 2007
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    This is one wonderful poem,that completely touched me and nearly made me cry. Great job!

  • leonamae
    September 16, 2007

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    I love it. I'm a middle aged woman, who's felt all of the emotion's and more at one time or another. when i read it i almost cried because you have so much insight for, who i believe, to be a young person.
    This poam was wonderful!!

  • wb hickock
    September 16, 2007
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    Damn good

    I like this poem alot. Fine job. Good Luck and Keep Writeing

  • Kitch
    September 11, 2007

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    this is really gd. i realy like the way that it says wat it means in a very descriptive way a geat write


  • oldphotosonlybringt
    September 4, 2007

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    wow deep, nice, i loved it bunches thank you bunches ofr entering such a lovely wright, really your words were amazing, much love to you sweetie..xoxox


  • stavykm gold member
    September 2, 2007

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    Beautiful

    I'm so impressed once again for your increadible gift. This poem leaves me speechless. In a childs mind and at the end if only! I felt much yearning and sadness for the if only's in my own life!!


    • Aurielle
      September 2, 2007
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      thank you and I hope you got my apologies in the messages saying those other messages wasn't for you...


  • WinE-reDpuddles
    September 2, 2007

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    oh wow. this is deep. i like it .. nice write. i absolutely love ur use of words. different.

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