You are the sunrise who makes each day
as your warmth embraces, curling round my heart.
The light that shines pierces my very soul
as always you have been my guiding light.
As rivers flow to reach their source
I have found my resting place in you,
as we kiss I feel our essences flow
mouths fusing unable to escape.
Your touch brings every fibre to life
tender caresses display your devotion.
Giving me the strength to achieve anything
knowing you will forever be by my side.
When we are apart I ache for your return
no one has ever made me feel this way.
I feel like a part of me has disappeared
the breath of life has left me empty.
If I die tomorrow it wouldn't matter
for you would be there right by my side.
leaving you would be agony
yet my sun would set in radiant hues.
Together we'll walk life's road
straight and clear the future I see,
travel with me to eternity
for I have already found paradise with you.
Author notes
'what if we were all so achingly in love?'
AliceinPoetryLand
A contest entry
- Know What Its Like To Feel?[♥] by WishMeAway--x.
700 points, ended September 12, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Lovely
I thought this was great, lots of feeling behind it, came from the heart. Good luck! -
when im with you i feel like i could die and that would be alright.
when i read this i thought of that. this is really sweet and very pretty.
good lucks
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wonderful
Oh my the descriptions and emotions. Really is terrific. Best of luck in the contest.
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"noone has ever made me feel this way." - "noone" would be "no one". "noone" isn't a word.
I felt it was a tad repetitious in the middle part, and by getting to the end I felt it was a verse too long.
When I was reading it seemed as if it was a rhyming piece, but, I noticed it was free-verse. I feel if one can make something seem what it isn't, is a good show on their part.
A nice piece here.
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I've missed reading your poetry
You have the essence of capturing a feeling or emotion and sharing that special something with us, the reader. Truly inspirational
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this was a wonderful write which held so many thoughts and emotions in it which i am sure many people can relate to
a wonderful write
well done and best of luck
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This is a great write. I enjoyed it much. You have such a wonderful way with words. Keep penning my friend. God bless you in all that you do.
Tabitha
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