I remember the night that we first met,
I remember how much I loved your eyes.
They were so soft and gentle
And as open as the sky.
I remember the first time I saw you
I knew that I had to make you mine,
And although we have been together for a while
You still give me those same butterflies inside.
And although I had never met you before
I felt as if I had known you forever.
And even though we had never really spoken
I knew that we would always be together.
Because the poems I have written of my perfect love
Are like the poems that I could write about you.
Poems written of two souls moulded into one
Poems written of a bond of love so true.
And when I look into your eyes
I see the man that I have been praying for.
And when you hold me close to you
I know somehow that I have felt your touch before.
I am so in love with you
You are my life's prize that I have won.
And I know that each year will be sweeter
And even better days are still to come.
A contest entry
- Let's Talk About Love (Members only For Romantics Dreamers) by jasminerose.
700 points, ended September 21, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Those eyes will get you every time won't they.
This was a lovely walk through memory lane a very fond memory I enjoyed thank you for sharing
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This poem warms my heart. My wife likes this one.
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Congratulations on your HM. There are always better days to come and this sums it up perfectly.
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
sweet
nice rhythym too!
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A lovely poem. The sentiments expressed are extremely beautiful, combining personal feelings with universal ideas of love efffortlessly.
I love the promise of hope and the potential for development in the poem. I found the fourth stanza, particularly powerful; the idea of all your love poems being epitomised in this one moment is a magical idea.
I hope these better days proved to be everything they promised.
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Nice sweet piece you've written. Your rhyme scheme i'm assuming was ment to have almost rhymes throughout, but not proper ones, becuase you seemed consistant about it, and it worked through the piece. I like the use of mostly cliche imagery, becuase of the nature of the poem. The emotion portrayed is extremely accurate, and you acheived yoru purpose well, if you'd like any critisism, I would suggest adding some more figures of speech. But well written
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oh this was so sweet and beautiful;
love does bring out the best in us
doesnt it
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I love this one!
This is mu kind of writting too
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I think you are a great poet...
so keep it up with the beautiful
work!!
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Congratulations on winning the contest!!
Really a lovely poem!
I like that you took us [the reader] back from before the romance begun, all the way to the forever after.
I can see that you truly love him, All the best!
My favorite part:
And when I look into your eyes
I see the man that I have been praying for.
And when you hold me close to you
I know somehow that I have felt your touch before.
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WOW! this was simply amazing! this poem was very very beautifuly penned with loads of imagery and descriptions! tjere was tons of emotions!
I was smiling all through this piece! it was simply beautiful! it showed how much you love this guy! i love the last stanza... its just so wonderful! you ended this piece very beautifully!
Congrats in winning a HM in the contest! This was such a great piece to read about love and finding your perfect match! nice work!
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Oh my... just the kind of love we all want to find. It's the thing we all hope for, dream about and yet very few find. I hope this is about your own situation, cause I'd like to believe that true love is out there, even if I never find it!
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awwwwwwwwwwwwove the sweetness here. very nice and loving.
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beautiful
Oh my. This was simply..amazing.
There are such beautiful emotions that you write in here. I loved the rhyme- it was so well done. Everything here is just perfectly written.
Love is so special. And every line proves it Simply beautiful. And this defnitely blew me away. Loved this!
Thank you for your lovely comment on my piece
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Vanessa, this is absolutey beautiful!
So romantic, loving and most of all so sweet that love is this wonderful for you!!! Your rhyme and flow is perfect!!
Thank you so very much for entering my contest and for sharing this beautiful poem with us all!!!!
Linda
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How lucky you dear one is. To be loved is much more sweeter than to love.With this poem he might have melted inside.So much love and caring, only those who feel inside can write. Thank you so much for sharing reflections Vanessa, and ofcourse best of luck in the contest.
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Excellent
That was very good Vanessa. Just waking up, mind has to re-boot to give good sensible comments! (You instead of Y but I know that you'll see that.)
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