[bby]
So ...
-you- say -you-
arent sure.
Guess what
[bby]
iim positive.
i gave you my
.wastedheart.
&&you wasted it
.evenmore.
i poured out my
.fuckingsoul.
&&you spilled it
.onyourself.
i gave you my
,,virginity,,
&&you threw the
,,boxitcamein,,
[[away]]
{whatthehellamisupposedtodowiththat?}
i thought you were
--the one--
&&you said so yourself...
we'd be together (always)
so what the hell ...
is going on?
{alliwanttodoiscry}
&&cry is what i'll do.
Author notes
The most cliche dirty pretty AND a gold winner.
Ooooh, two in one.
A contest entry
- glitter whores, wasted hearts, & fuckin' rockstars by TheStupidLamb.
700 points, ended September 13, 2007, 14 entries
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{pleaseletmeknowHOWbaditsucks}
Comments
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Thank you for enterign and helping my Dirty Pretty education!
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I really like the story. You could possibly use more dirty pretty. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
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thanks for entering.
that is cliche, but you've made it your own brand and i like that.
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Very deep and powerful write. =] You wrote the emotion out quite nicely. ^-^ Simply Fantastic! Awesome write.
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I am so sorry you have been hurt so deeply and that you lost something you can never get back. I hope life gets better for you. Good luck in the contest.
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Interestingly written poem. I like your use of spaces too, good luck.
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I like how you used spaces to your best advantage, putting words together to show a quickening of pace, even though it was just a little confusing to read. A nice piece of artistry. Great job and good luck.
Hugs and Kisses,
Tiphanie -
Well, I have no idea how you feel. I'm still a virgin and yeah. but overall I could tell how people can relate... I tried my best to encompass the emotions here,but it was a difficult thing to do because I for a long time still will never understand. I liked it, but there is not really much more I can say.
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I know how you feel. I mean, I'm not pregnant [though I did have a scare] but I have the same situation with the bloke. I lost my virginity to him, was going to move in with him and everything, thought it was going to be forever but no, forever wasn't fucking good enough for him. I loved him lots and now he says he doesn't anymore. Bleh, I just hate it. x
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I still love this and can still feel the pain in it, thanks for entering.
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Wow. That is such a painful story. Love it so much.
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very good
apt descriptions of bad feelings
feel better! you will get over it sometime and later be glad you esca[ed
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Thank you so much. Glad to know there's still hope, right?
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Hey
Yea I read your profile and I am so sorry about your realtionship stuff. Im almost 18 and yea, I have a kid. It was with a guy who i had been with for 3 years and we were very much in love. Now things are different and we rarely even speak. You should not have to stay with a guy that doesnt know if he wants to marry you or not after he gets you pregnant. Just because you are pregnant does not mean that you have to stay with him either.Yea you would miss him and it would be hard(i'm not gonna lie) but if you surround yourself with friends and family it will make it easier.My mom was always there for me to cry on her shoulder.You need people like that around, not people who don't "know" if they want to marry you.Try to get over him. My guy did the same thing when I was pregnant.he didn't know if he wanted to be around for that so after 2 months or more of his drama he decided he wanted to be around(cause i didn't say fuck that)And the Drama never stopped Now we are broke up and he doesnt even wanna talk to me n e more. When I look back i regret all the time I wasted tryig to make him happy and missing him. Don't stress out about Your guy(trust me I know its hard 2)and don't let him ruin the awesomness(haha) of being a mom. Enjoy being pregnant it was one of the happiest times in my life(most of it lol). Don't let anyone and their drama take the Joy away from you. I know that I dont know you and it seems kinda weird I'm just giving you advice but its stuff i wish people would have told me when i was pregnant. So if you ever need to talk just message me. -
This is so sad. I'm really sorry for what you're going through sweetie. I know that emotional pain hurts more than physical pain ever could. Wonderful write and congrats on the gold shiny thing sweets. I'm just sorry you have to deal with this.
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i love this bbydoll! =]]
finalisssssssssssst, fo' sho.
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