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Daddy

I know, daddy, I love you
And I know, daddy, you love me too
But every time I think of you...

I can cry, you know.
I try not to let my tears show
I am a big girl daddy, and I know you think so
But daddy, I am not strong enough, no.

I can break, you know.
Sometimes I can't take it, though.
I fall, break and cry,
Some of the time.

You have changed my life, you have
You will always be my dad
You're special to me
Daddy, you are a treat

Oh, when will I see you-
Before December, please?
I really miss you, Daddy...
Have you really seen?

Author notes

This is dedicated to my daddy. I love him very much and miss him too. I am looking forward to seeing him in December!
Update: He said I'm not going to see him in December. He doesn't have the "money." Not even when I said I didn't want presents if it was going to cause a problem.
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  • Walk-Free
    January 2, 2008
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    A really touching poem.

    Each time you said 'Daddy', I felt your heartfelt plea to see him this December.

    Although he didn't manage to visit you, i'm sure he still loves you loads..

    Don't let this dampen your spirits; it might be a blessing in disguise (:

    Thanks and good luck in the contests


  • leander Moderators member
    November 9, 2007

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    This is a very heartfelt poem that you've written here, full of emotions and this kind of missing feeling, desolation.

    I'm sorry to hear your daddy isn't near you, and that he won't be able to make it to you for December But it's still november right now so you never know what time might bring for you

    Keep it up, and thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander

  • Cheesey
    October 22, 2007

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    Wow that was good! I couldn't amagine being away from my dad. My mom died 3 years ago and if I was away from my dad I couldn't stand it. You're Brave! Great poem and wonderfully worded. good job.
    -Cheesey


  • sultan gold member
    October 6, 2007

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    Tears

    Ouch ... I'm away all the time too and have been all my life. My daddy was too. I didn't want this life. I feel these words exactly; and, I'm so sad that my children are in the same boat... even though some of them are 'big' like you. Thanks. Love, Sultan.


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 7, 2007

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    Hard being away from one parent for any length of time - but it appears as if you will be seeing him in Dec. Good to know when and you can look forward to that time as it gets closer. Easy to read and understand the sentiments in these lines -


  • Stickboy
    September 5, 2007

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    awwwwwwwwwwwwww I love this I am a daddy's boy my daddy is in Kuwait and only gets to come to the states once or twice a year I can not wait until November to see him ...awesome job you have done on this I wish I coulkd give you more the three applauds ... you might like the one to my daddy http://allpoetry.com/poem/3045199

  • Celestial1
    September 5, 2007
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    I meant *misty-eyed. Oops

  • Celestial1
    September 5, 2007

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    I'm a daddy's girl, and he is far away from me so I don't get to see him as often as I'd like. This truly brought tears to my eyes...I'm not just misy-eyed here, I mean threatening-to-spill-down-my-cheek tears. Beautiful to see how you cherish your father. Always do. I loved this.


  • Ray Von
    September 5, 2007

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    Aww, I know the feeling!! At least this has brought out some good poetry out of you!! Thank you very much for sharing this beautiful write full of raw sentiments!
    MAria

  • atty-poet
    September 5, 2007

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    Lovely write from daughter-to-daddy. Your dad would be proud and touched. However, you should know that the famous and tragic poet Sylvia Plath wrote an equally famous and tragic poem called "Daddy", with an entirely different context. You might want to change the title here: maybe "Dear Dad", since this flows like a love letter. Love to see young people writing real words, instead of texting. write on.


  • Kylaya Halon
    September 2, 2007
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    yhou penned with emotions as your ink. Well done pandy. I can't ever say I know how it feels to be apart from one parent. I have a close family, but just the thought frightens me. You did well expressing your feelings here. Wet words. that's what I call em. Written in tears. Keep up the great work.
    May Your Muse Forever Inspire You...
    K.V


  • guttermouth
    September 1, 2007

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    I am envious of having that type of relationship with your father, where you actually want to see him. Value this bond... this is very touching and I hope you take the time to share it with him!


  • Heavens Child
    September 1, 2007

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    Aww... this is so sad and touching. It must be very painful to not be able to see him. Wishing you all the best.

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