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Dream Land

To quick to judge
I thought it was love
Lost in a dream land
Of red red roses
And soft sweet kisses
Drawing small purple hearts
But I couldn't open my eyes long enough
To see that the roses were wilting
And taste that the kisses were bitter
The storm was approaching

A contest entry

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  • layla.
    September 2, 2007
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    Nice take on the prompt... I liked your ending.
    Good luck!


    <3


  • Forlorn Dreams
    September 2, 2007
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    Wow, very nice. I just looked at this contest and this is great for the prompt. I really REALLY like this. A lot. Especially since its short and free verse but it still screams Megan. Its truly amazing. A favorite excuse me ANOTHER favorite

    KitKat


  • guttermouth
    September 1, 2007
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    Awesome, would be surprised if this does not trophy. Very nicely written!