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Genesis - a Triune poem

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In the beginning
            all was God and God was all
                                                there was.

He held hope and love like a babe
wrapped in a soft cotton coverlet.

He softly caressed courage and fortitude
between His strong hands.

He whispered words of power while
He watched imagination flower.

 

 

 

In the beginning
            all was good and there was peace
                                                in the calm.

The first sunrise spread gracefully across
the earthen orb.

From east to west

light frolicked in the dawn shadows
and found a home place.

Trees reached for the light in the sky
and buds became tomorrow's beauty.

 

 

 

In the beginning

           a man and a woman shared
                 dominion and tended the home place.

Made in God's image,
they danced in the dawn
and raised grateful hands
in thanks to their Abba.

 

 

In the beginning
            all was good and good was all

                                                            there was.


Author notes

 In the beginning was the Word, and the Word was with God, and the Word was God. The same was in the beginning with God. All things were made by him; and without him was not any thing made that was made. ~ John 1:1-3 KJV


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  • deercatcher
    July 1

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    In hebrew, the letters have spellings and the letters carry intrinsice layered meanings. Then there are 3 letter clusters that carry meaning. The hebrew word for Genisis is Bar shiet which literally means "at the headness of" head being the top, beginning, important part. It is the sound of the first verse of scripture. Bara means to create. Baruch, means to bless. So creation carries layered meanings of blessing, creation, the head...

    And in Aramaic, Bar means "Son."

    So in the language Jesus spoke, the first sound in the Bible is "Son..."

    In the beggining, was the word. (son!) and the word was God...

  • aslanlight
    June 24

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    Breath taking!

    Wow beauty pours from your pen effortlessly! This has given me such a good feeling I'm going to log off and sleep on it.

    Peace Georgia

  • klassy lassy
    December 22, 2007

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    i just read that verse you quote in your author notes yesterday, and your poem accesses it beautifully. I was just thinking how the word is thought, and the word is God. What creation manifested in Mind!

  • Mirthryl
    December 5, 2007

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    Lovely photo compliments your poem well!
    I enjoyed your “He held hope and love like a babe”, very nice fatherhood motif.
    Second section, where you set the stage with “peace in the calm”, the sunrise and trees lines fit this format very well. The word ”frolicked” seems a tad out of place, and I am not sure I understand the idea of light finding a home place “in the …shadows”? Lovely expression of trees reaching and budding to become “tomorrow’s beauty”.
    In the beginning of section 3, you refer again to “home place”, which makes one wonder if it is the same “home place” that light found in the dawn shadows of the previous section? Also, another word choice might expand on the idea of “dawn”, used both with “shadows”, and “danced in the dawn”. Beautifully expressed “raised grateful hands in thanks to their Abba”, I can see it from your description.
    Nice use of repetition with “In the beginning” . Thank you for sharing your lovely poem!


  • MargaretG silver member
    November 19, 2007

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    I like this, the form has good flow the way you have done it. I especially like the reflection in the italicised lines. I enjoyed thinking it over, thank you for posting in the group!


  • Winklings gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    This is a lovely take

    on the Hebrew story of Creation made manifest in the new covenant by the apostle(s) who wrote John.
    Lyndon.


  • Cylis
    November 18, 2007

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    You painted a vivid image. It was so peaceful and calm. I admire your faith and your optimism. I liked the first line the most. It really stuck out and the poem kept my attention with it's imagery. Great write.


  • Samplette gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    Oh, I like this very much. I never heard of a "Triune poem" Tri is three, so three parts....whatever it is, this is great!!!
    Sam


    • Winklings gold member
      November 19, 2007
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      I would assume that Christians

      have a Triune Godhead. Three in one: Creator; the Son and Saviour; that of God within ~ the Holy Spirit. All is the Word or Truth.

  • Sonja silver member
    October 27, 2007

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    I like this kind of poetical creation, free of any frames and poetical border, with your own free flowing feelings and expressions.
    ~Sonja~


  • Nam
    September 29, 2007

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    "and found a home place." - I don't feel "place" is really needed in this line, and though you do mention the "home place" again, it suits the next line more than it does this one.


  • aslanlight
    September 29, 2007
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    This is enlightening and uplifting scripture and I do believe we sometimes write holy scripture! You are a master poet and a light shining in the darkness!

    Peace Georgia


  • dr3a-martin3z
    September 24, 2007

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    love it

    so beautiful......glad i found this group so i can read poems dedicated to Jesus, and this is wonderful.....Drea

  • bedovich
    September 10, 2007

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    wowwww this is worth makin a frame with a picture its sooo wonderfulll


  • Ender Tyberius
    September 10, 2007

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    This is nice. Good description. Thanks for sharing!
    I like the way you group the words here. Nice!

  • Whisper Mckee
    September 10, 2007
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    I Really Liked this. The words flowed..You paint well with words could see the dawning of time.


  • mendee86
    September 10, 2007

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    This was a beautifully written paraphrasing to one of the most timeless parts of the Bible. Though sin and evil have consumed our reality as we know it, one day this scripture will ring true once more - and good, only good and God will exist.

    You do an amazing job with descriptive words and your vocabulary used is great! This poem flowed well and played on the imagination at the same time.

    'He whispered words of power while/He watched imagination flower.' - Had to be my favorite line of your whole piece. It brought the whole thing together for me. :] I enjoyed this. Thank you for the inspirational write!

  • Viyanna Rosemarie
    September 10, 2007

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    In the beginning all was good and good was all there was.


    wouldn't it be wonderful if that was how it still was. thank you for sharing this wonderful write with me tonight as i needed to read something uplifting. congratulations on the honorable winner and i am looking forward to reading more from you. viyanna rosemarie

  • Tabitha-Robin
    September 7, 2007

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    Made in God's image,
    they danced in the dawn
    and raised grateful hands
    in thanks to their Abba.






    In the beginning
    all was good and good was all

    there was.




    Your light shines in this piece of art. This is full of life and love. I feel God's drawing spirit in this. Thank you for your entry and God bless you in all that you do. Thank you and Good luck in the contest,

    Tabitha

  • Heavens Child
    September 4, 2007

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    Very few have found a way to paraphrase such a foundational piece of scripture. You have captured both the intent and the beauty of creation. Thank you for sharing your work and entering the contest.

  • bethan-gaze gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    Beautifully executed throughout, complimented perfectly with the stunning pic and backdrop. What can I say? The words speak for themselves ... very best of luck with this delightful piece.

  • Figaro
    September 3, 2007

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    Astonishing! So beautiful - it was a real pleasure to read, and the picture you are painting is crystal clear. I think the Lord would approve.


  • Resurrected-heart
    September 2, 2007
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    Beautiful

    I was truely moved by this writing. God has blessed your pen.


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    September 2, 2007

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    awesome

    How totally amazing! This is just perfect and I could only wish to write a masterpiece like this. I love the refrain about all there was. It is true that in the beginning God was all there was. That is almost beyong human comprehension to understand that creation was something from nothing! That God spoke into existance all we see. God bless you, Mark BTW I long for the day that your last refrain shall be true once again.....

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    • thelordreigns gold member
      September 2, 2007
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      AMEN - what a glorious future we have to look forward to just because our Lord loves us so much.

      Thank you Mark.


  • Live-By-Love
    September 2, 2007

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    I have nothing complicted to say about this. Only that this is a remarkable poem, and deserves applause.

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  • cherchezlafemme
    September 2, 2007

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    This is of absolute beauty and an unique tribute to the Creator. This is my very fav lines -
    He held hope and love like a babe
    wrapped in a soft cotton coverlet.
    Extraordinary! Every image you use to describe the creation step by step celebrate God centredness in his Home, invisible and visible, a higher universe in the immensity of the cosmos. You write like stages, forming continents, vegetation, oceans, crustaceans, divine kingdoms created for us coz He loves us. A beautiful orientation and balance in spiritual nature in your poem. God bless.

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  • EncounteredEpiphany
    September 2, 2007

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    Bravo...


    So exquisitely written the artistic vivid imagery that danced in my head, reminded me of a painter with his paintbrush, painting a masterpiece.

    Lo-Amo

    Salute!!!!!!!!
  • Celestial1
    September 2, 2007

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    This was beautiful. The imagery is fantastic. Wonderful description of God's magnificent work. Thank you for sharing this.

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  • guttermouth
    September 2, 2007

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    Beautifully written, I love the use of your opening/closing statement to tie the whole thing together in a neat package. Beautiful words, well done!

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