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September

Septembers silky days of growing hues

Enfold this old heart of mine.

Plants of summer, to slumber they go,

To let falls fiery colors arise.

Ember waves of promise tip-toe across the

Mountain tops of glorious trees afire. 

Beaming palate across the valley sweet,

Embrace each day with gladness,

Rejoicing as falls beautiful days arrive.

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  • Kevin Moderators member
    September 25, 2007

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    don't invert subject/verb: 'to slumber they go'. nice beginning, but it gets more cliche later. Too many punctuation marks as well, there's something at the end of each line. Double-spacing bothered me some, I prefer stanzas, though I know it's required for the s/e/p/t/e/m/b/e/r thing... overall I enjoyed the read, thanks!


  • Puppydog gold member
    September 15, 2007

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    SO GENTLE AND BEAUTIFUL!!!

    Change of the seasons are a wonder unto themselves. I have always since a little boy held in awe the way the world changes as it revolves around the sun. I often have sat in thought and said there is nothing quite a beautiful.


  • Elfin
    September 5, 2007
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    well done on winning silver. Val


  • RedSnow
    September 3, 2007

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    I think you should do one for October next!

    Wonderful just wonderful Kelly. Such beautiful words. I'm always so ready for fall. I'm so glad I read this and you wrote this Acrostic so clever that you don't even realize it.

    Thanks,

    RedSnow


  • purpledragonfly
    September 3, 2007

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    This is beautiful and just the colors and images and feel gets you in the mood for the season --- wonderful penning (as always). Hope you're well Kelly -- been too busy but I've missed you and been thinking of you Betsy


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    nice

    Got me feeling the anticipation of the leaves turning colors, and piling them up so my little one and I can play with them!good piece- pen!


  • PageTurner
    September 1, 2007

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    Beautiful...

    Your Acrostic artistry combined with your colorful commentary,
    heralded this harvested homage to autumn...

    "Ember waves of promise tip-toe across the
    Mountain tops of glorious trees afire."

    Seasoned... Jus' Right, Scribe!
    ~ Nicholas


  • moon2u
    September 1, 2007

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    Autumn is one of my absolute favourite times of year
    and you have captured its beauty with your words...
    your poems are always a delight to read.
    moon2u

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