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Eliminate

Devine for just one heart beat
In between screams
Delight, delight in such innocence
For such sadistic mind
There were no bounds
He'd bellow 'eliminate'
As he plunged himself lower and deeper
Into the abyss of hell
Driving all his emotions into metal
It clinked heavenly on stone
Sweat charged a sexual reward
Condensed breath at atmospheric pressure
His skin cracked with rage
Left under filthy fingernails
Victims he'd devour
Women had a spicey taste
Which would send one on a night of passion

Many had felt his tongue

The bad breath and rotting teeth

Sinking into their soul

And it would CRACK

Just like a porcelian doll

Fragile creatures he'd pick on

Would he leave it in writing

Blood, semen, sweat

A birthmark for their afterlife

Author notes

Not dark enough I dont think. Or without any sense. Judge?

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  • Jasmine Minx
    September 2, 2007
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    that was..wow nice job you really hit the mark good luck in this contest.

    Aliann

  • EdibleRoses
    September 1, 2007

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    "Condensed breath at atmospheric pressure
    His skin cracked with rage
    Left under filthy fingernails"

    That gave me some INTENSE imagery and I looooved it. Sick, twisted, and fucking beautiful. The ending rocked too. You didn't try to make the evil "clean". You jumped right in there and rolled around in the mud. Love it.


  • Lactar Wolfgang
    September 1, 2007

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    now that was impressive dark and twiated. As far as direction leave it to the reader to determine the cause and reasoning. I like it