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Another World

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Another World

Climbing out of myself and looking back
I wondered how, I withstood the attack
My emotions were framed upon the shelf
Looking back and climbing out of myself

He had dwelled in the tendrils of my mind
I had sold my soul it had made me blind
With his putrid weight and his great evils
Of my mind he had dwelled in the tendrils

Escaping the fate, I crawled out of myself
From out of the frame and off of the shelf
Slipping past the guards I opened the gate
I crawled out of myself escaping the fate

I am now alone in another world
With my new found fate before me unfurled
Too scared to cry, if I had only known
In another world I am now alone

 

 

 

Author notes

Swap Quatrain:

Each stanza in the poem must be a quatrain (four lines) where the first line is reversed in the fourth line. In addition, line 2 must rhyme with line 1, and line 3 must rhyme with line 4 and so on, BUT not repeat the same rhyming pattern on subsequent stanzas.
Rhyming pattern: AABB, CCDD, and so on.
The Swap Quatrain was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.

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  • Griswold silver member
    November 13, 2007

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    Very well written and in wonderful form as usual, excellent flow and rhythm. Best of luck to you...Scott


  • Aura of night
    November 4, 2007

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    I feel the sadness

    This is really heart wrenching, explaining how through all the weight of the world on your shoulders, the only person strong enough to escape is you. I love this.


  • PerfectImperfection
    September 8, 2007

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    A beautifully penned piece of form. Great take on the prompt chosen. Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!


  • second-born
    September 4, 2007

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    This is such a sad poem especially the last line but somewhere between the lines...I felt a deep emotion of the need to be free...very powerful poem full of bitter emotions written artistically...well-done my friend...


  • ellipsist
    September 3, 2007

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    beautiful form

    and once again, executed in such an elegant manner... so much appreciation of language demonstrated in your pieces... masterful and artistic, as always!


  • Tercil gold member
    September 2, 2007

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    And that other world is fine as you survived the first, you'll survive the next, and always will, A lovely heart and soul rendition of heaped spoonfuls, that's courage, should I say! Titus


  • Whoochi gold member
    September 2, 2007

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    Oh seriously loved the words with this....it goes great with the picture and sounds like my own story about me...well done DOLLFACE, Best of Luck!


  • PerVirtuous
    September 1, 2007

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    You have the ability to write dark works with an air of innocence and dignity about tham. It is an eerie thing. So, the poem is enigmatic and ironic. It has a wonderful feel to it. I like the way the swaps work. That is an art in itself. Very strong and should crush in the contest.


  • HaleyMary
    September 1, 2007

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    Powerful write. Great flow. This makes me think of how people may think there is always something better out there even if what they have already found in life might seem satisfying enough, as people, we always wonder if there's something we're missing out on when we make a choice. Good luck in the contest.

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