Open up
your valley's wide.
Make me drunk
with the essence
of your hypnotic love.
Spin my wheels of delight
and set me free
with your witches magic.
I'm charmed
by the taste of you.
Give me all I need
to reside in your dimension.
A contest entry
- Answer Me??????? by theredcatjazzoflove.
1200 points, ended September 1, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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seductive, and smooth... not overly done and the words flow well together... you can feel the words; they just draw you in... good job.
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This is so very to the point and yet seductive! It makes me wanna fall in love! I like the charmed by the taste of you! I haven't felt that way in awhile!
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It started off sounding a lot like a hundred other poems I could find on AP in a matter of minutes, but then it got better. The second half was really solid and made this a good piece, but you might want to examine the first portion and consider a slight rewrite. Just one person's opinion... write on.
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Ok I like this it was sexy I see my beautiful red head commented on your piece I am glad to see group participation she is just so beautiful like this beautiful piece you written good luck in the contest Mr. Howard -
nice melodic piece, good luck!
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