I heard it once before, reiterated in that same pacifying tone:
'It's the one who won't be taken who never seems to give.'
I find it so easy to submerge; the longing to find what I seek
Except it is just at arm's length blinking at me with reflecting orbs;
Simple ambitions and complex measures seem to go hand-in-hand.
Pressure points on the crippling brink; nearly dropping ourselves to fate...
Recognize that here lies Our Own Faults and blame spills crimson over every palm.
Author notes
for contest: remorse/regret, go with it
as for your poem: "See How I Feel For You"
The quote in the second line is from the song "The Rose".
at the end where it says:[ here lies Our Own Faults, ] i wanted it to give an idea of a gravestone with the generic "Here lies _______, a kind, loving friend and parent" or whatever.
it ties in with the line preceding
anyway, that's what I was alluding to there.
A contest entry
- Anything by Madison Mary.
1000 points, ended September 18, 2007, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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do you think this is you? or something that you had to struggle with?
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I think I definitely had to sit and wait for the energy to flow out of me for this one, but I think there's a mix of the need to get the emotion out but still write with a bit of skill.
Some days the words come easier than others
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Very Wise!!!
& True...
I like how u end it perfectly...
Thnx for entering & best of luck
GloriousGift
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This is very good. congratulation
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i love the idea of gravestones saying here lies our own faults...that's genius. is it a line from a song? i reallly like it :]
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