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It Would Be Lovely

sighs...It would be lovely to kiss the man,

I, being told he is my true.


Certainly, I would make my heart do the kiss,
where the time would sway patiently in love,
and love would bring its magnificence.

In our heart’s boat kissing as it floats,

upon a lover’s pond of shed scarlet love,
Where a glass of stars held sweetly by the night,
would suddenly break,
  shimmering,

 the stars would fall,
in a vapor of pink,

sighs,

moans,
upon our sweet facade,

and I would delve into his heart,
to feel its whole being as it is,
Cradled by the kiss of tender.

Then would rise beautiful Aphrodite above us both,
she would plant a crystal between our lips,
thus would be certainly,

the true kiss,

as the light,

still shining between our lips,
in its rose pearl,
seen by this world,

            they would wonder,
                            curiously, they would stare,

“what is that white light?”



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  • hotchocolate gold member
    March 4

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    This write is a lovely piece but unfortunately it doesn't go with the promp as follows

    Prompt:
    What do you want to do with your life? Who do you want to help later on in your life? What are your plans and what role your going to have in society in the future?

    Simplified Directions:

    What do you want to be when you grow up?

    Thank you for your entry but I will have to DQ this.
    sorry hon


  • N e a r
    February 3, 2008

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    Wow. As I read this, it sounds like something Juliet would speak on in Shakespeare's famous play.
    Your words drew me in.
    I am now sitting, staring at this screen in awe.
    Beautiful words.
    Thanks for entering. Good luck.

  • xTomorrowx
    January 11, 2008

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    Wow. This is a very good piece of writing, it's beautiful, and filled with love without being corny, it deserves a trophy just for that lol
    It's so beautiful, and uniquely written, greatly showing the beauty of love...
    Thankyou for entering this into my contest and best of luck.


  • Beating gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    Wow! I really like this piece, it's so well written. It's like you have your own unique style in this, and I felt true love and hope as I was reading this. Good job!


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 9, 2007
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    This piece has great flow I really enjoyed reading it Good luck in the contest


  • Rele anmwe
    November 9, 2007

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    Much Love

    This is pretty nice. I like the flow of this great piece. It shows how beautiful your mind is. I wish I had a dagger, I would aim for your heart. I would not kill you, but dazze you with the most powerful possion of love that ever exists. Keep up the great work and than you for sharing. Your one and truly,

    Mr. Mack


  • Myjoy gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    Brillinat! This is just beautiful, I loved the style, I loved the flow. Your wording is just fantastic. Well done and good luck.


  • leslielovesthomas
    November 4, 2007
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    Thank you for entering and good luck!
    Lesli


  • X iMPERFECTiON x
    October 24, 2007
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    very nice! very intriguing! good luck& good job! =]

  • Tempa Lee
    October 21, 2007

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    you're by far the lucky one. i was just about to end the contest early. i read it and i really really enjoyed it. it was a great piece of work to read. i'm glad i got to read it before the contest ended.

    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Dani~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    Erotic and enticing, I would always prefer verse to rhyme and scan but this is wonderfully evocative and leads the reader gently through to he end


  • ultimate beluga
    September 2, 2007

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    this poem does have really nice imagery, youve used words very poetically thanks heaps for entering!


  • BeautifulFlame
    September 1, 2007

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    Very good almost fairytale like , beautiful !
    Very sweet imagery i enjoyed reading this one !
    Thanks for entering
    ~Lisa~


  • Mortal Love
    September 1, 2007

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    I loved this poem. It was so beautiful and the imagery (sp?) was great. This poem was just wonderfu. Thanks for writing it. Good luck in the contest!


  • stavykm gold member
    September 1, 2007

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    So So Beautiful

    I love this poem. I felt so much love and romancing. Brilliant. My favorite part is and I would delve into his heart!!! Yes It Would Be Lovely!! Perfect Title. Amazingly written!! Thank you for the reading!!


  • Talking Toni gold member
    September 1, 2007

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    Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    This was amazingly writen so smooth were your words. loving,and reaching out for the knowing of the heart of the one you love. I felt drawn inot this kiss with you feeling and experiencing your words through your brilliant imagery!!! The intensity of this poem was unbelievable and the reader could feel that intensity all the way through!!! Thanks for sharing your heart with me today and this was definitely worth the click!!!~~Toni~~


  • Angelwatchingme
    September 1, 2007

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    I forgot to say something, keep up the creativity that you have been blessed with. Peace and smiles


  • Angelwatchingme
    September 1, 2007
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    Lovely

    Good Luck. I believe that this piece is worthy of a prize, but I am not one of the judges. GR8!!!!!

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