She woke up at a friend’s place
still left with last night hangover
cuddling up over a thought
of hot caramel coffee
while lazily craving out of cozy bed,
a rainbow bouquet
magnificently decorated on dressing table
spooked her eyes.
"what’s this?", she screeched
"Oh surely not the milkman", her friend chuckled
She moved towards the innocent flowers
her heart beating cold
to spot the little note behind
a purple tulip
"I am waiting for you", it read softly
her eyes squeezed in pain
and conscience questioned
"am I ready for another start?"
soft hands kept fondling those lovely petals
Author notes
Every poem is linked with the previous one
In a list
A contest entry
- One Moment by WillAlwaysLove.
450 points, ended September 4, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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lovely
i enjoyed it. wonderful poem, especially the way it leaves its shadow within the last line. thanks for sharing a very sweet poem. I have only two english ghazals posted so far, written in a same format as Mr. Zahhar writes, but i still have a lot to learn.
all the best - Sukhdarshan -
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Congrats on the Gold trophy! My dear, this was and is a masterpiece! 
My only regret is that I didn't read this before the contest was over but I am glad that they saw what I got out of your poem 
... Beautiful it is so wonderful to read your poetry again! 
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lol i now realised that it won gold
....hey cool pic you have in there...anyway i am sure you would like if you read other poems in the collection too
thanks ya
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I loved it. Thank you for entering, good luck.
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well written, visuals are perfect, flow is smooth thank you for sharing
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This is a very good approach to a love poem hints instead of of dear you are a red stinky rose.lol
Very good excellent appraoch
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thank you friend I hope my other poems in the list would interest you too
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I love the way that
this piece ends... it leaves so much to ponder and the thoughts are so eloquently stated... very well written, poetess!
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thanks a lot for checking out the poems from this list. it flows a story. I am sure the latter parts would too interest you
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Wow. I loved the intense simplicity of the poem and how it lures the reader into the moment. You did an excellent job here, creating a world in a single moment. ::huggles::
Write on!
~*~SP~*~
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hey my sweetheart I was just waiting for ya ...thankies
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It is amasing how the small moments in life can create the most beautiful poetry!I liked it alot,its simle but beautiful,thank you for sharing!
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I really like the suspense in this poem. A romantic gesture from an unknown person. "I am waiting for you". is all that it said without a name. I love it!
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haha not exactly a suspense because the latter part is revealed in next poem. Also as I have mentioned in the authors comment that every poem is linked with the previous one
but so sweet of you to get back to my work often
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Wow
This was such a beautiful story. Thanks for sharing. I love romantic moments like the one you told here. Nice job.
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