I opened my eyes, and what did i see,
This godforsaken world, a catastrophe.
All the hate, the sadness; it's tearing me apart,
I ask myself, does anyone care, does anyone have a heart?
I listened to the news today, and i burst into tears,
Children being kidnapped, men and women being murdered.
I wish this madness would end,
I wish we all could just get along, and make amends.
The way the world is today, is exactly how its going to stay.
All the anger, all the greed, and all the people who don't give a damn.
I'm watching this world fall apart piece by piece,
Nothing being done to ease these feelings i have in me.
If people would change, this world would be alright,
Im done, i give up, so go on ahead and fight.
A contest entry
- Your BEST Prewrite! - For Mike [degarmo] - by Never Fall in Love.
950 points, ended October 29, 2007, 130 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ayy, very very true.
Not many people give a damn though about the society, environment and as such..
So it's great that you have written this and hopefully made some people think a bit.
Now for the poem, although I can sit here and completely agree to your contest - I feel that this still needs some revision. The first verse few great and I was impressed. But the next two verses were lacking in flow and rhyme. AT least for me, tears and murdered don't rhyme..
Read it out loud for yourself, it should help.
Good Luck in the contest and thank you for entering
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Very True!!!
The world becomes a more dangerous place everyday. The children have a bleak future to look forward to. Great poem you have penned.I liked the rhyme and the imagery in your poem. I Thank you for sharing. Tske care. Sandy
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Midnight, your cry is echoed by many.
Our only recourse, each in our own way
to create peace around us.
Your emotion is so well expressed in this piece.
Well done!
Aesthete
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This is very good. You are right that the world will never change, but the only thing we can do is make the best of every situation and not give a damn what happens around us, otherwise this world will drive you crazy.
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I love this poem, I was thinking about doing one like this. A VERY good write in my opinion.
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