Have you seen the little children
blowing up the discotheque?
Improvised, devised killing women?
WHAT THE HECK!!!!!!
Pointed fingers accusing me
of shit they stink of too?
Insanity has set me free-
tell me about you!
How can you stay sane at all
if hell is where we're bound?
Satin sheets, the prophets call;
there's no love to be found.
Playtime, finding riches
keeps the stitches ripped apart
lovers - pimps and bitches;
hunger sent without a heart.
Build your ivory tower
with the power you posses;
it's just a golden shower
on your life, an ugly mess.
The homeless are your heritage;
the hungry are your kin,
the dealers hide behind the hedge,
cause you won't let them in.
Minimum wage is how you feel,
a mandatory price;
and so my senses all just reel,
you tell me I'm not nice.
Insane inside the gray membrane,
the cuckoo's left the clock!
It flew away upon the rain,
you chased it with a rock.
How can you stay sane at all
when looking at your way,
making all creation fall;
you think you'll get away?
I think that I'm the sanest one,
who sees things in the sky;
whose heart won't beat at all for fun
who will not tell you why.
Whose life is kept in pieces
while releases come so few;
watching men kiss nieces,
torn apart by what's in view.
I know how you do it;
you see through it, it ain't there.
so you put me through it,
I'm insane, and you don't care.
A contest entry
- Insanity, Heed it's call by Swintha.
500 points, ended September 6, 2007, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - modern depression by Dangerousparable.
900 points, ended January 9, 13 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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This is very good full of anger and release.
Well done
Simon
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I agree, this was insanity written very well... I liked the thoughts as they jumped, creating a vibe of intensity. I also enjoyed the "in a crazy world, I am sane" feel it had behind it
my fav part was by far the last:
"I know how you do it;
you see through it, it ain't there.
so you put me through it,
I'm insane, and you don't care. "
best of luck
~peace
Michelle
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I know this is said alot but this poem really spoke to me! the third and fourth verses especially. I love the roughness and vulgarity of it all it just fits it perfectly. It portrays insanity in a beautiful manner. And it tells it as it is and thats what I like about it,
No long emotional descriptive words that don't get to the point.
Nice Poem, I'll have to think about this one.
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Nice rhyming, I can see through the poem that the rhythm of the piece got better and better which kept me reading! When I read the first line I thought it was going to be a political poem but after reading the rest of the poem I can see what your trying to say.
Good Luck
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Hey this was really well done. Considering it was quite a big poem it still kept me reading the whole time. There was great rhyming and rhythm and structure to the piece. It was a good interpreitation of insanity and good use of title. I loved the metaphors portrayed.
Good luck with the contest.
-Swintha
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