As I sit by the lake
Time really does fly
I just sit and watch
As a log floats by
Lazy in the morning sun
It crawls by like a snail
I just can't understand
Why this log has a tail
Then as it gets closer
I begin to realize
This log is real unusual
It also has two eyes
Suddenly it comes to me
I'll be here for awhile
Staring out from inside
Of a great big crocodile
Author notes
For a contest... picture inspired.
A contest entry
- Smile Crocodile. by PoetryPuppy.
350 points, ended September 7, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME! (now 12,000) - Part 2 Children's by cricketjeff.
1000 points, ended December 12, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hit My Funny Bone by SmokinHotWhiteTiger.
525 points, ended December 28, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very cute -- Well Written
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Thank You For Entering
I will admit I thought it was Beaver or an otter and I donno why but I liked this. a crocodile and indeed it is scary n don't blame ya for not liking em much. I enjoyed reading this and felt it had a good combo of humor in it. keep up the good work n good luck -
Many congratulations on your HM in our contest, a worthy winner.
Please join in the remainder of the contests in our Rhyming Extravaganza.
Again congratulations, Sue and Jeff
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Very interesting little write Good luck in this contest Congratulations on the bronze trophy that you have already won.
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A log that has eyes
my what a suprise
What is a fellow to do
You'd better stay clear
for if it get near
you could end up in a stew
A wonderful little poem Good luck in the contest
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I could see this poem in one of those stand up picture books that children love.Lovely!!!!, Ros
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Cute
something my kids would surely like...they like to hear about alligators and crocs. Great kids poem
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Great Write
A morning at the lake is a perfect title then the first line as i sit by the lake and the last line Of a great big crocodile. I'm laughing great write. It is fun a playful and I needed that. I'm terrified of crocodiles!! Thank you for sharing your gift with me to write poetry! stavykm
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I'm no big fan of giant reptiles which can do the things to me they're capable of either. Thanks again for taking the time to read and your thoughtful comments. Greatly appreciated.
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so cute, what a great child's poem. very good flow. really enjoyed thought of mistaking a croc for a log. congrats on trophy.
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What a cute write. I would be so scared to see a crocodile I would be running lol. Wonderful imagery. I so enjoyed reading. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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Very good
Your rhytms are different to mine and I had to read it twice to get the sound right, but now I have I have few bitches about it, none worth mentioning. Excellent.
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Nice croc poem, showing how they can camouflage themselves as a log, crafty old reptiles. Love the twist at the end. Best wishes in the contest.
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Oh, this is cute. I like the twist at the end! Ummm, no more swimming at the lake for me! yikes! Pam
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Scarey. I like the ending and the twist. Really neat.
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I think you may be in a bit of trouble then huh? Inside a crocodile isn't the ideal place to be 
Well done and good luck 
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thank you for your cute poem, love Kiarna
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yep that is just what they look like too
great images i got from this poem
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I would freak out lol.. this was fun to read and I thank you for sharing with us.
Many Blessings
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Aw a really nice simple rhyme scheme which just makes the poem, cute I guess =]
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Have you ever been to Beaver Lake? I don't think crocodiles would be there though. I like the lacidaisy fee to your poem. It's fun!
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