Life is a mysterious journey that bends and curves many times, growing and teaching and encouraging u to find our way in the universe.
When I was young, I lived in squallier, penniless, pride less, broken and torn, physically and emotionally.
In my teens I strove to understand what was around me and change, hoping some one would see the princess that was within me.
When I left home striving to find healing, I was trapped by what I thought was love but it ended to be a living hell
Now…
I can’t believe thins are going good, I am dreaming, clear sky’s ahead. Who would of thought my journey would have brought me here. What a wonderful end to a massive journey
Please tell me what you think
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Life's a journey -- you're so right!
I agree with the title and sentiments here! This short poem is attempting to say a lot in a very short space! I think the narrator and the references to the reader are a little mixed up -- as are the direction of time (tenses). These problems can be easily fixed in a re-write! You chose a tough subject to write about and have included good images, like "trapped" "dreaming" -- I think that you should develop your imagery a bit more and add some length to this poem and it will be marvelous! Good work!
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lovely
I think the best poetry is good because it expresses something we can share. I share this with you.
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