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Bloody Rose

Along a crimson creek
Grows a shriveled bloody rose
From torn and shattered stem
Thorns drip a deadly brew
A dry and brittle bud
Spews forth a noxious fume
Who’ll put their lips upon
This bloody shriveled rose
Who’ll care for this lost soul
Which life’s dagger has sliced into

Author notes

I wrote what I felt. I don’t know if it’s poetry but it is a feeling, or perhaps a longing.

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  • JustBe gold member
    October 12, 2007

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    PLEASE do not remove your entry. I do plan to give you quality commentary, and I am sorry it has taken me this long. to even say this much. This is easily the hardest contest I have judged, if you did not win, then that means only just slightly more than nothing, as far as this judge is concerned.


  • OnyxtheForsaken
    September 7, 2007
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    wow the imagery in this is amazing. And the metaphor of the withered rose, it conveyed so much pain and sadness that you felt. And I care for this lost soul, because it is stronger than it feels right now, and will use that strength to break free from the binds of the darkness that are so often iron clad.


  • rite
    September 1, 2007

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    In this plane of spacetime where we are trapped in prisons of matter and energy we cannot avoid to suffer and be miserable. We have to take the poison and abuse and finally die to escape the conjurings of this illusion. But we will be lead to victory in the realm of Light by The Light. We cannot seriously hope to remain unscarred or in some cases even avoid being beaten to pulp, incinerated or ripped apart. But this treacherous and agonizing universe WILL most definitely come to an end. While we suffer we must focus on The Light and help others to do the same. It is our Source and Destiny. Stay strong and take care,

    U


  • myrataal silver member
    September 1, 2007

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    I'll put my lips to poison

    and drink the bitter cup
    I'll tenderly destroy all
    which inside burns disrupt
    I'll pin the rose to tresses
    of fragrance and of soft
    to show the rose its splendor
    in chambers of Love's loft



    Myra


    • sanch011
      September 1, 2007

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      I really love this reply..........I hope it's meant for me because I intend to place it on my myspace blog as the perfect reply........and yes of course I will place your name on it.
      again thank you for this wonderful reply

      • myrataal silver member
        September 1, 2007
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        Of course it is meant for you ...

        and for all souls needing it. As soon as this contest is over, I will post it on my page too. AND your poem!

        Hugs
        Myra

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