The Chill
You feel as you walk through the dark
A shiver up your spine
A flash of light you spin
A nerve struck deep within
Your mind your soul
You see it a flash of talons and terror
It could have been just an error
But it's not that you feel
You see it ready for the kill
You pray to God to save your sins
But it doesn't happened Bam you're dead
so many things running through your head
The flames erupt the devil laughs
He seems to split your soul in half
He pierces you so many times
One for each and every one of your crimes
It's for eternity you know
Dying for every evil seed you ever sowed
The ravens that pecked out your eyes alway crow
You are screaming in agony but no one every hears
The darkness envelopes the black flames sears
If you ever get out you would always pray
To never go back to Hell again
A contest entry
- Dark Vs. Light I by Austere.
900 points, ended September 15, 2007, 40 entries
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450 points, ended November 17, 2007, 63 entries
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550 points, ended April 28, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Scary
it gives me chills!
I liked it though.It was creative but scary.
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i like it it is deep and my friend lizzie liked it also
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This is an amazing write though it has nothing to do with my contest. I truly enjoyed the piece so i'll leave it in, just letting you know you have poor chances of winning. Though, I do love your style of writing, so if you'd re read what the contest is about and submit more, I'd love it!!
Thanks.
~IvoRy -
Lovely write. The chill does indeed go up the spine. Great imagery and verse.
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yes.....darkness likie ness woot and that made no sence
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marvelous poem. very morbid indeed. thank you for putting it in this group. and thank you for entering...
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I liked this piece, but it does seem a little forced, sometimes it's better to go without rhyme if you are having trouble, but it is a wonderful piece
Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
this oen is my fave outta the new ones
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a good dark piece of poetry you have penned here, though it is a little hard to read without highlighting with the red font on this background
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