Stagger with burning expectation
away from the heat
of a day's fiery visitation,
crawling in dire and despair need
towards any darken path
where shadows quiet
the tears of light.
Searching always
for that one certain ebony hue
that kills the pain
from when one stared
too long
into the sun of dreams
and ended up blind to reality.
Sobbing from the scars
creating poor vision,
hoping a shroud of blacken excuses
will let the blurry images
become creations of the world
one sees in heaven mirages.
Finally hearing the voice of purest sight,
calling from a special abyss,
overcoming fears of the blackness,
discovering their can be peace
at midnight.
Author notes
A certain shade
A contest entry
- A certain shade... by Virgoan.
500 points, ended September 4, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"overcoming fears of the blackness,
discovering their can be peace
at midnight."
Wonderful lines!
The whole piece manages to create subtle execution where a certain shade of warmth stays.
Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN -
"Searching always
for that one certain ebony hue
that kills the pain
from when one stared
too long
into the sun of dreams
and ended up blind to reality.
" oh, my goodness....who has not known this but, who, but you, coudl express it so perfectly? -
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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Ahh beautifully penned indeed. My favourite lines:_)
'from when one stared
too long
into the sun of dreams
and ended up blind to reality.'
Wonderful imagery to create an uplifting write.
I like the way you used a dark approach to what is essentailly to me and inspirational piece.
All the best with this
Gaylene
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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Nice,
Perfect piece for this contest, and wow, what a flow.... You sure do know how to sling that imagery around like no-one's bizz. ;) Keep up the great works brother, and thanks for sharing you. Peace, pen on! :)
-Brother Timothy
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Thanks so much Timothy for the great comment. And for being a great brother.
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